ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

I might write a sequel, I might not.

ifdre - 4 years ago

Oh, I really want a sequel for this story! It's so interesting!

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

Indeed it is not.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

It's hard to argue with that logic.

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

It was actually an older work of mine I, for some reason, didn't post here. I'm struggling with a bout of writer's block at the moment, so haven't started on the dragon idea yet.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

A short piece to warm yourself up before that dragon idea of yours?

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

We are different people.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

Various Writer has the idea; SlilofinaDragon writes the story; and you expand on it. Can we make this circular and have Various Writer turn this into a multi-part series that then inspires SlilofinaDragon to turn it into a saga of series and so on and so forth?

Also, I'm not convinced you and Various Writer are different people. I've spent many days analyzing my stringed wall of photos and too many coincidences are adding up. I'm onto you, Proud.

Oh, and my alternate realities theory keeps on accelerating. Or, these are just a bunch of unrelated vignettes in the style of what I remember about the show.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

That would be Eka's strange way of interpreting .doc files. I would recommend using .rtf to format your documents in.

pendingdelet390234b2 - 4 years ago

Its all good and you're welcome

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

Thanks. I kinda wanted to add more onto the original story, like Ukraine having a girlfriend, etc. I'm sorry for all the random spacing in the story itself, I think when I was uploading it to Eka's it glitched and put the random spaces in,

ProudVWriter - 3 years ago

Hehe, thanks.

Rgt - 3 years ago

Awsome!!!

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

All right. And another thing I forgot to mention above is that that's an interesting way of doing a time skip. Rather than placing it in the next paragraph or doing a page break and letting the reader assume time has passed, you bridge the two paragraphs with a parenthesesized time. An interesting technique indeed.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

That's weird. Didn't think there was anyone with the actual name "Username". Ah well. They get a free shoutout.

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

The first thing we agreed on was the setting. Did we want it to be set during or after the Clone Wars. We both wrote it, in a sense. The first dialogueless part is his, then the 'six years later' part is mine. I tried to separate his and my parts, respectively. And he doesn't have an account here.

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

Vore Collections is on Wattpad and on AO3.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

I'm getting this feeling that you're attempting to find [i]the one[/i] by writing these pieces, as they all seem to be minor variations on each other. Maybe that's just me. I failed in finding the first 48 chapters of Vore Collections, but maybe that's another reference I'm not getting. In any way, Canada has magic; that's cool.

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

I was inspired by this AO3 chapter. https://archiveofourown.org/works/20401813/chapters/55577878

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

From the previous entries, I thought that Ukraine eating Canada was a regular occurrence. Here, it seems like Canada is getting payback on Ukraine for a one-time vore instance. You aren't pulling alternate realities on us now, are you? That would be rather tricky. And I think Ukraine's unexplained shrinking does not fit as well here as it did when America shrank. Here, you have the space to explain it, even if you are trying to keep the POV as third-person limited around Canada.

So, do you write all of these on your iPad? That's rather impressive. And have you thought about saving these in Rich Text Format? Eka's likes that format better for whatever reason. Displays much more coherently.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

Ah, the hint of Ukraine's true, scaly identity at the end there is a nice touch.

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

Sorry for the super late reply on this, but that's his writing style. This is the piece he wrote, and I just posted it here,

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

Changing up the format are we? When you say trade, do you mean that you wrote this up for your trading partners, or this piece is the one they wrote and you just posted it? Either way, the format change is interesting. I always like a play-like style. Better than wasting time by trying to be creative with dialogue tags. I do have to give you back the points you lost last time because of the voreception. Nothing wins me over like voreception.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

No intro, no fluff, no pause. Straight to the point and no time wasted. Simplicity at it's finest. An easy read. Although, I do have to dock you points for going with cleavage vore, because we all know that nipple vore is the most superior form of breast vore.

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

Ironically enough, I am actually planning on writing a story with Ukraine as a dragon.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

I would like to preface this comment by saying that it is not an insistence for your to rewrite the story. Rather, it is food for thought.

In any case, let's talk about mythology. Nagas are certainly popular on vore sites like this most-popular one, but I think we can get a bit more specific than such a well-known creature while keeping the scales. Have you ever heard of the Zmei, or more fittingly, the Zmiy in Ukrainian? The Slavic Dragon is quite the ravenous one, as most Dragons are. And if you prefer something more serpentine, closer to a Naga, there's always the Smok, which really just means snake and sometimes a snake that turns into a Dragon (Zmei). If you ever wanted to bring the scales back to Ukraine, you could always retcon her into being something more regional to her namesake than a Naga. Like I prefaced, food for thought.

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

I was actually inspired after reading a few stories that had this pairing. And thanks for the criticism, it's appreciated.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

Echoing a sentiment from the Ukraine/Canada piece and acting as the representative of a more general reader, I have the curiosity of wondering if you invented this unique pairing or adopted it. I can imagine that the Hetalia fandom might be one such that absolutely revels at the thought of pairing off such distinct characters. On a technical note, I've noticed between this one and the last that you shift POVs rather abruptly. It can be a bit jarring, and I would suggest either staying in one point-of-view or making the change clearer, either by making the shift more gradual or outright stated. I do very much like the last line. Post-vore cuddling is underrated.

ProudVWriter - 4 years ago

Their alternate human names are made by the Hetalia fandom.

VoidInVoid - 4 years ago

I caught your post asking for comments on your pieces, so I thought I might oblige your request since I always enjoy soft vore writings. Heads up, these comments won't always share a common theme.

Now, it's been many years since I've seen anything related to Hetalia. Are these alternate names for these personified countries ones created by the creator, the Hetalia fandom, or you yourself? Either way, you using them does create good variety. And I don't think you need to explain why Ukraine uses the word "knickers" and that Canada understands her. I'm assuming you're writing these stories with the assumption that your core audience will know the quirks and personalities of these characters already - unless you're making drastic changes. Even then, the explanation does break the flow. All in all, I learned that Ukraine would have no trouble overtaking Canada and that few people would make news of the situation.