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Tags: Cuddles! Cuddling Cuddling belly Digestion Digestion Noises Fatal Huge belly Human Prey Male Prey Multiple Preys Offscreen Vore Pokemon Pokemon pred pokemon prey Pred POV Sylveon sylveon pred Unknown prey Weight Gain

Opal discovers that Amy’s fallen on some hard times, and, despite her wishes, decides to help her out. On their quest to get her back on her feet, they stumble upon the perfect opportunity. Unfortunately, in order to take said opportunity and get Amy out of her slump, they may have to engage in a bit of a cheat day.

Meant to post this one yesterday, but got tired after the mountain of tags I had to put on the shorts compilation. Either way, here we are, at the end of the stockpile! This one also happens to be the start of a rather large line of dominoes; in what way, I shall not tell. The next story’s gonna be a doozy, and is actually almost done, so look forward to that!

~5.8k words.

Google Docs link in case Aryion messes it up somehow:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oDZ84IyZfXa0gWxGC6qsctv3rgcl1MA5N-IZA45gubI/edit

Ask Opal, Amy, and/or me questions here: ngl.link/gempen

Pokémon is owned by Game Freak. If the owners of this copyright ask for this to be taken down, I will immediately remove it, no questions asked. (Please don’t sue me.)

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Posted by Typhuun 5 months ago Report

Another lovely story!! <3

Posted by GemPen 5 months ago Report

Thanks! If you don’t mind, what exactly did you like about it? I’m still trying to improve, so it’d be super helpful to hear what exactly I did well here.

Either way, glad you liked it!

Posted by Typhuun 5 months ago Report

You use onomatopoeia really well! And the general belly descriptions you have are just, HUFF. Soft <3

Posted by GemPen 5 months ago Report

Thank you for giving feedback! I really appreciate it.

For the onomatopoeia, I learned from the best, that being RexLou. If you like stories with lots of great sound effects, he’s your man.

As for the belly descriptions, I’m actually surprised you found that to be a strength of mine. I’ve always thought I wasn’t the best at descriptions, so I’m glad to hear I’m doing better than I thought I was!

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