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Away from the bustling cities in the dark cover of the forests, mystical and reclusive folk dwell. Even as they've grown familiar to one, she learns that she is far more important to them than she could have imagined.
One of the biggest themes in vore is, for me, trust. I wanted to, among other things, explore it mostly on its own, without as much of the other large parts of the act, those being romance and closeness. They can be saved for another story, another time.
(And I know that elves and faeries are technically the same thing. I don't care.)
This one's 11.6k words, too. My longest yet.
This one should be a bit more polished than my last stories, because not only did I have the honor of Skorpio and
Sylv reading over it, I, in a first, did my own proofreading. I actually did more than one draft for once. Everybody clap or something.
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Posted by thirdaltaccount 4 months ago Report
Good god... 11.6k. Wow. I'll clap - um, *clapping noises*, both for the length and the proofreading. Quite excellent.
This was certainly a fascinating piece. Beyond grasping the more prevalent theme of trust here and deciphering a more druidic magic system - quite interesting, honestly, I've never seen vore and magic intertwined in a way that makes sense before - I've... probably come to regard this as your best. The characters here are all interesting, I find the entire narrative easy to follow, and it felt natural (pun? maybe?) to read. Well done, Ender. The ending here is quite open. I'd ask if it was done intentionally, but let's be honest: Everything written is intentional.
The long and short of it is that you should be proud. I certainly am. You're really doing well. The mix between dialogue and monologue is appropriate, and the first-person came across relatively naturally. This was not a focus on the physicality of the act, evidently, but... honestly, a more spiritual take, if that makes sense? Maybe I sound insane, but that's what I was thinking.
Posted by Ender9107 4 months ago Report
Ah, thanks for the review. I am proud, and I'll definitely be keeping at it, but maybe in more concise way moving forward. I think this is nearing the point where it'd be too much for the average single sitting.
So, uh, the magic. That was hardly planned out at all when I started. I just really needed a thematicly fitting excuse for elven prey to happen. It was a weird fixation for a while, and everything else was sort of built around that as the starting point. This does mark the longest I've gone in a story without any vore happening, though. I think I'm just liking the writing itself just as much.
That ending wasn't even supposed to be the end point, originally. I went through dozens of options for something more, but nothing really felt natural after that point, like stretching out a climax. I do like having open endings, though. It gives fuel for imagination and plenty of room for continuations which may or may not happen. In this case, though, probably. The entire latter half of this one felt like a setup for more stuff.
I'm glad the spiritual feeling landed, too. Physical intimacy just didn't feel quite right in this scenario.
Well, now I'm wondering if replies like this are normal. Maybe I'm a little over-eager to rant about my own projects. Oh well.
Posted by skorpio 4 months ago Report
You really polished up this story between the draft I read and the final version. Congrats on a well-done story! The theme of trust really comes through here.
Posted by p1313 4 months ago Report
Extremely cute