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The Midnight Wolf
Chapter 1: Prey
Part 1
Part 2
End
An unusual wolf pup in a forest of monstrous predators determines her place in the food chain.
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This is the first part of what I would like to make into a vore-focused narrative story, inspired a bit by the likes of CassyInko and Rayen.
I don't know how well this is going to work out, writing a narrative story with vore, so please tell me your thoughts and what you think I could do to improve it or make it more enjoyable. For instance, I was considering making an alternate version of this part where the wolf girl doesn't get so lucky, a 'bad end'. Is that something that people would like?
The wolf girl also doesn't have a name yet, feel free to suggest names for her.
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Posted by Kasra 8 years ago Report
Ah, nice! It's rare to find anything where the prey actually succeeds in fighting their way out, and this was very well put together. I also like the pacing you set with the line breaks.
Definitely looking forward to seeing this become a series!
Posted by MidnightNoon 8 years ago Report
Thank you very much, I had fun with the line breaks in this one. I wasn't sure how people would feel about the prey escaping, but I'm glad you didn't mind it. Second part is underway.
Posted by Kasra 8 years ago Report
Well, it's a bit more realistic, isn't it? The adult, sure, it can handle its food. And that scene was very well done for all us vore lovers. But when it transitioned into the child, well, all bets were off. Though they may have been off from the start, given that you said in the description that you wanted it to be "the first part." It was either an escape, or reformation. I think you chose and executed well.
Can't help you with a name, though. I'm terrible at names.
Posted by Deegdumdoodilly 8 years ago Report
Excellent writing, and a very unique situation that I haven't seen before. I was a bit surprised to see the prey escape, though. A 'bad end' would certainly be appreciated.
Posted by MidnightNoon 8 years ago Report
I have ideas to use the predators encountered in this for one-off stories, where the prey doesn't get away. There's a very fun idea involving someone having to wait in the bird's crop for their turn while someone digests in the stomachs.
I may at some point still do the bad end for the wolf here, but I feel like I've explored too much of this encounter here for a full part on that, so it might just be made as a mini-piece. Though, I do get carried away with detail. It may end up longer than anticipated.
Regardless, there will be plenty of bad ends for other prey. I can't use the wolf as prey too much, or it'll get boring fast, though I could do non-cannon stories with her.
Posted by Deegdumdoodilly 8 years ago Report
Looking forward to whatever you decide to do next. Don't worry about overdoing detail; in a vore story, we call that good writing :)