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Tags: Belch Belly Burp Butt Expansion ddlc Digestion Disposal Doki Doki Literature Club F/? F/reader Fart Farting Futurebellyache Gas Gassy natsuki Natsuki (ddlc) Pooping POV Scat second person Second Person POV Sentient Disposal Sentient Scat Sleep Eating Sleeping pred Toilet unaware unaware pred viewer prey Weight Gain Willing to unwilling prey
Natsuki has fallen asleep in the literature club and everybody else has left it to you to wake her up!
Surely nothing sinister can happen, right?
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My first story on the gallery!
I'm working on a sequel too.
Oh and there's disposal after the ~~~~~~~~ in the story, I figured it was obvious by the phrasing though. There's some slight references earlier, think that's okay. I like disposal okay, sue me.
Image is a zoomed in version of this https://pawoo.net/@pettankon/57395296
Thanks Redeaux for finding it!
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Posted by TheAkkoDimensio 5 years ago Report
Where did you get the picture for the story icon?
Posted by FutureBellyAche 5 years ago Report
I added it to the description!
Posted by Ouroboros 95 5 years ago Report
While I am not the biggest fan of disposal, I still enjoyed the story. Loved how the player character regretted their decision and the twist that Monika set it all up made it better.
Posted by FutureBellyAche 5 years ago Report
Thanks!
Sorry about the disposal, I do like hinting about it through the story but its true a lot of people dont like it. Ill try to keep it within the disposal lines and anything outside is hinting at best. Think i was a little too direct at one point.
I liked the idea a lot though, especially because its one if the few ways I could use a 2nd person view for the story. Which was kinda cool.
Posted by onemantroupe 5 years ago Report
Very well written, I think you nailed the characters' interactions!
Posted by FutureBellyAche 5 years ago Report
Thanks! I tried to remain atleast a little accurate, even while doing my own weird thing.
Posted by sadlyknight 5 years ago Report
I really like the story. Psa, disposal is underated we should have more stories with it.
Posted by FutureBellyAche 5 years ago Report
Glad you enjoyed, I also do enjoy disposal, though I wouldn't mind making it easier for those who don't to enjoy my stories. Maybe I should mark the ones that mention it outside the ~~~~~ with disposal teasing or something.
Posted by Redeaux 5 years ago Report
Here's the original drawing.
https://pawoo.net/@pettankon/57395296
Excellent story.
Posted by FutureBellyAche 5 years ago Report
Ah thanks! For both!
Posted by TableManners 5 years ago Report
Nice! Unique perspective that I very much enjoyed!
Posted by Messiah 5 years ago Report
If this is hinting to monika/yuri then ill surely wait heh
Posted by marcusthesmith 5 years ago Report
To be continued?
Posted by Night5Gaming 5 years ago Report
Do you still plan on continuing this?
Posted by FutureBellyAche 5 years ago Report
Yes, i just havent had a good opportunity. Though stories probably won't come out suoer quickly from me. I kinda just write when I wanna.
Posted by Circle0Trick 5 years ago Report
This is an excellent approach to second person storytelling and perhaps my favorite use of it yet.
Disposal is lovely and I will always appreciate its presence. Also, since you actually like it, it’s just perfect to have it. The transition to it was down with narrative brilliance, btw.
Speaking of the narration, I get the feeling the style has something to do with the characters in this story themselves, but I still feel inclined to reiterate how much I loved it.
You have my truest thanks for your work.
Posted by FutureBellyAche 5 years ago Report
Thanks for so much praise! Its almost threatening.
I was really happy with the wnd person perspective shenanigans. I thought it was kinda clever. Its not used often and i thought Monika was the perfect way to go about it. It is really weird to write though.
Posted by ShamefulInterest 4 years ago Report
Neat Read! Good Job c:
Posted by NagaRelic 4 years ago Report
The first time i read this it was more out of curiosity, i had not finished it as i got distracted by life.. a little later i came back and read it as i realized i never did see how it ended.
And then i had gotten to the shift of perspective and it threw me for a loop.
I should have expected it but i have to admit, you did very good at the personality of them all. And i do reread ot here and there for that perspective shift and the fact you had written monika near perfectly.
Only makes me wonder of you plan to do one with all the girls and the.. player i guess, have monika get rather annoyed and save her for last?
(Just a thought)
Either way, you are a good writer and you did really good here