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Eric's stomach begins to rumble on his walk to work, who should he bring home as 'company'?
Warning: Story contains disposal/scat below the line.
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Posted by GayPred 4 years ago Report
Hey everyone!
Thanks for the read!
Im curious if anyone has any comments or critiques? Im looking to get better at ny wtiting, so i wanna know what should be improved!
Posted by Sum1 4 years ago Report
This is great! I especially like how you write digestion and disposal, and I have a feeling Brayden will be making a comeback :D
If I had one criticism to make, it'd be related to the formatting. Namely, your use of paragraph indentation is a bit inconsistent, sometimes there's a few spaces, sometimes more, and other times none at all. This doesn't affect the readibility much (or at all, even), since extra spacing between parts of the story helps a lot and is something I wish more people would use, but it's something I noticed. I'd suggest using the same indentation in every paragraph, but it's a matter of preference.
Posted by GayPred 4 years ago Report
Thanks!
Im glad you liked it and thanks for the criticism! I will try to improve that for my next story!