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The Bears� Lullaby
Hush, my little worried one
The trees, they are not dead;
The leaves, they will return in time
Though now they fall instead.
The daffodils have gone to sleep,
And so, my child, must we.
The colors are not gone for good,
First sleep, and then you�ll see.
The north wind stalks these woods my child,
With sharp and icy claws
His teeth will chew your ears and frost
Will bite your tender paws.
Cold may be the stones above,
But warm your den below.
Safe and snug with leaves and love
Beneath the winter snow.
Now get thee to your den my child,
As I shall go to mine;
There to sleep and soon to dream
Of coming warmer times.
When golden sun shall flood these woods
And blunt the north wind�s bite,
The daffodils and we shall wake
To springtime�s glorious sight.
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The Bears� Lullaby
Hush, my little worried one
The trees, they are not dead;
The leaves, they will return in time
Though now they fall instead.
The daffodils have gone to sleep,
And so, my child, must we.
The colors are not gone for good,
First sleep, and then you�ll see.
The north wind stalks these woods my child,
With sharp and icy claws
His teeth will chew your ears and frost
Will bite your tender paws.
Cold may be the stones above,
But warm your den below.
Safe and snug with leaves and love
Beneath the winter snow.
Now get thee to your den my child,
As I shall go to mine;
There to sleep and soon to dream
Of coming warmer times.
When golden sun shall flood these woods
And blunt the north wind�s bite,
The daffodils and we shall wake
To springtime�s glorious sight.
Wish I could think of the title of the music that was going through my head as I wrote this. "'Twas in the noon of wintertime, when all the birds had fled / When mighty Gitche Manitou sent angel choirs instead . . ." Anyway, it's an attempt at lyric writing. Hope it doesn't sound too "jingle," as I sometimes have had issues with rhyming poetry . . . .
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I've not been a true fan of meter without rhyme (though the opposite I do love), but my main concern is with the leagues of young writers who refuse to tighten their meter, producing sloppy excess syllables and half-rhymes. I'm a bit of a poetry Nazi when it comes to this stuff, and that's why I don't usually critique poetry.
Thank you for your time, then *smile* I suppose if I'm going to do it, I'm going to try to do it right.
I try to stick to a regular meter or avoid it entirely. Strange things do happen, but they are, as you say, sloppy. I am not enough of a genius to write good intentionally sloppy meter 8)
I try to stick to a regular meter or avoid it entirely. Strange things do happen, but they are, as you say, sloppy. I am not enough of a genius to write good intentionally sloppy meter 8)
"The north wind stalks these woods my child,
With sharp and icy claws
His teeth will chew your ears and frost
Will bite your tender paws."
That by itself would be really neat...a version of Jack Frost that looks like a bat, wrapping himself around the back of your head to give your ears frostbite...
With sharp and icy claws
His teeth will chew your ears and frost
Will bite your tender paws."
That by itself would be really neat...a version of Jack Frost that looks like a bat, wrapping himself around the back of your head to give your ears frostbite...
Hum… *taps finger on chin* Maybe there really is something to this poetry thing after all.
Used to avoid it because I didn’t seem to get most of what I had to read of it in school, but with all of you throwing your little snippets here and there its starting to grow on me.
This is yet another example of one I actually like, and that’s saying quite a bit.
Used to avoid it because I didn’t seem to get most of what I had to read of it in school, but with all of you throwing your little snippets here and there its starting to grow on me.
This is yet another example of one I actually like, and that’s saying quite a bit.
If I avoided everything that was a bad experience in school, I wouldn't do very much ;)
Actually, I think it's just much easier to come by something like this in snippets when you are ready for them instead of the "last chance to make them literate before they get a haircut and a real job" classes in high school or the "cram as much culture in your head as possible" poetry unit in many colleges. Schools are trying to teach "Romeo and Juliet" when the kids are only ready for "Paradise by the Dashboard Light."
Actually, I think it's just much easier to come by something like this in snippets when you are ready for them instead of the "last chance to make them literate before they get a haircut and a real job" classes in high school or the "cram as much culture in your head as possible" poetry unit in many colleges. Schools are trying to teach "Romeo and Juliet" when the kids are only ready for "Paradise by the Dashboard Light."
That is really amazing. I love the way it flows so nicely and I can hear the voice clearly in my mind of how this will go. (may not be exactly the voice and beat you are thinking of, but it's very soft and motherly gentle.) Very well done, this actually makes me smile in it's sweetness.
latelatelateLAATE~!
That was very cute! I'd say you captured that feel of a mother singing her children to sleep. Did you have any specific tune in mind to go with it? I at first tried being generic and attaching it to Braham's lullaby, but that doesn't seem to fit... hmm... I suck at doing that though. XD
That was very cute! I'd say you captured that feel of a mother singing her children to sleep. Did you have any specific tune in mind to go with it? I at first tried being generic and attaching it to Braham's lullaby, but that doesn't seem to fit... hmm... I suck at doing that though. XD
I honestly wish I could remember what hymn it was, but at any rate it was an arrangement that I learned in a church choir when I was in high school. I don't even remember all the words, but the tune still runs in my head. I suppose you could say this was a way to sing the song and get it OUT of my head 8)
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