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Tags: Absorption Digestion Disposal Eaten Alive Eaten with Food F/F Fart Farting Gas Gassy Hololive Macro/Micro Nakiri ayame Ookami Mio Oral Vore Pooping Scat sentient breasts Sentient Disposal sentient fat sentient pudge Sentient Scat Shirakami Fubuki Shrinking Toilet unaware unaware pred Unwilling Vtuber
Hello! As this is my first submission, critique it all you want~ I would like to get some feedback to improve on my writing
This story focuses on AyaFubuMi trio from Hololive
I hope you like it~!
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Posted by KyngSama 2 years ago Report
Pretty good!
Posted by OokamiRice 2 years ago Report
Thank you~ I worked quite hard on it! ww
Posted by Mechdragon1k 2 years ago Report
This is fairly good but I could use more focus on the oni insides.
Posted by OokamiRice 2 years ago Report
Ooooh! Good critique, Ill keep that in mind for the next time I write~
Posted by unsigned 2 years ago Report
I love this! We need more like this.
Posted by OokamiRice 2 years ago Report
I'm glad to hear that you like it! Ill try to do more in the future~