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Marc has a difficult schooling. Fortunately, this is his last year of high school. He is considered a loser and is teased daily by the other students. A change in his name, Ashley, turns his life upside down. She is a new student and strangely Ashley is interested in him. Marc discovers that this beautiful girl hides a strange desire that will make him doubt the sincerity of his friendship with her.
I have always wanted to write a long story about a Vore relationship. I tried to describe the feelings of a boy facing a vore situation more and more present in his life. He sees in his friend an unexpected hope but he can't imagine facing a death trap.
English is not my first language.
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Posted by Hollow67 2 years ago Report
I'm excited to find out what happens next And I love the Possibilities in their friendship and you did pretty well On the writing some hiccups they're on here but pretty good I would love to see more from you and future:^)
Posted by kailan 2 years ago Report
Thank you for your enthusiasm. I'm glad you like the story. I have started writing the sequel. I think this story will be in 3 parts. I'm trying to focus on writing longer relationships with predators. Sorry for the writing mistakes. I know I need to improve my English.
Posted by rugli 2 years ago Report
I must join and say you are off to good start, and your english is not to bad...but its always good if an author feel they can improve. With that said it will be interesting to see where you intend to take this. Introducing other characters might make things more interesting depending of course what you are aiming for.
Posted by kailan 2 years ago Report
Thank you. I won't give away too much of the rest. But the story will develop more than just the relationship between Marc and Ashley.
Posted by kailan 2 years ago Report
Thank you very much. The stories with a less precipitous relationship with the vore are few. I wanted to create this story because my favorite writers do a lot less at the moment. There are few elements in my story that are random. Unfortunately I can't say more than that because I don't want to spoil the rest. I have almost finished the second part. The positive comments have motivated me a lot.
Posted by kailan 2 years ago Report
Thanks for your comment. I think the road is going to be slippery and the precipice is not far. I will take your suggestion for the plot into consideration.
Posted by bartek21 2 years ago Report
Interesting start. I am curious what to do next. Please continue.
My English is terrible.
Posted by kailan 2 years ago Report
Thank you for your encouragement. I have already made good progress with the second story.