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Did you know today is Nyx's birthday ? I, personally, forgot, and was reminded when I booted up my DS today to play Fates.
Now Nyx is most likely my favourite Fire Emblem character and maybe favourite character in general, and I really wanted to do something for her birthday, but due to not being in a good state to write, ( seriously, who knew that was this unbelievably hard to write, let alone consistantly ?! ) I did not write anything for the occasion...
Good thing I already had something ready, then !
I did not really plan on posting this, this is one of my first serious nab at writing and I don't know about the quality, but this is all I have, and as I said I really wanted to post something for her birthday.
The thing is a bit old, and I am pretty sure I repeat some words a little too much, but you tell me !
Also, this is not a birthday story in the story, I just used that name to fit the occasion, enjoy ! Hopefully it warrants a read...!
...I live ! I haven't done anything in a bit, mainly because I just did not manage, but hopefully I'll get the... New Year's post up... at some point... D-don't laugh, this is quite hard ! And, I'll keep on improving, so if you have any advice, even though this story is a bit old, I'll gladly take them !
All hail the Birthday Queen !
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Posted by mrsirman 1 year ago Report
Your writing looks nice. Though some of your sentences run off in strange ways, and sometimes you begin a new sentence building on the last idea, which isn't wrong, it just reminds me of my rough draft for my Felicia story I repeatedly started sentences describing moments of irony with the word "Alas", it wasn't my intention but just a habit. Sometimes it's the opposite for instance in the middle of the story while discussing the use of the staff Nyx says "Hmpf, very well, I shall try then. But I make no promises" but it should we written "Hmpf, very well, I shall try but I make no promises." unless you wanted to include the then you could space it out with some narration so something like Hmpf, very well, I shall try then." A moment of doubt crossed Nyx before she added "But I make no promises."
Still I did like reading your story and congratulations on being the first person to write a Nyx focused story on this site. You posted it on such a fitting day no less!