Posted by Thor11 1 year ago Report

Easily the best story I’ve seen come from you! Stelle really needs more time in the spotlight! You also can’t convince me that March doesn’t make an adorable treat!

Posted by Fatedmeal 1 year ago Report

You would have an easy time of convincing me of that for most characters that I don't ardently hold on a pedestal as a non-prey.

Posted by MugenNoSaga 1 year ago Report

Wasn't expecting to enjoy a random Star Rail story this much. But what I did ike the most was the Seele x Bronya part of it and the little "voyeurism" part that March 31st played on it. Having Seele get a charisma break as she was fantasising about devouring the glasses secretary, really would like for that scene to happen for real.

Also sad that Bronya's dream of getting NTR'd banished like that.

Posted by Fatedmeal 1 year ago Report

Thanks! I've also had moments where I decide to read a random story that I stumbled on and it really hit all the beats that I like. I'm glad this story did the same for you, and that you latched onto one of the earlier scenes. I tried to go out of an old comfort zone that I've been growing out of with that scene (used to not be a fan of NTR).

Also there should definitely be some justice for Bronya. Supreme Guardian losing out on her cuck dream date. Much sadness.

Posted by MugenNoSaga 1 year ago Report

I'm the kind of person that gives a try to many types of tags because if the book, image, story, etc. is good then could be a nice experience (as a reader or watcher). What bothers me the most is when people decide to do them in ways that you can tell they just added the tags to bring more eyes into their thing work and wasn't done like it should be.

For example some doujins with pregnant tag and at most we see is a single page or two with the girl in a pregnancy state at the end and then the book ends.

The fact that Seele decided to make out with March 3rd out of nowhere and that kickstarted something in Bronya. Making these two to forget the possible idea to getting the secretary into their mix and Seele deciding to unintentionally building a mini harem of bottoms just to let Bronya have an NTR fantasy. That itself sounds like a lot of fun with the added benefit of vore thrown into the mix.

Also good luck exploring things outside your comfort zone.
Edit 1: I forgot to mention that the mental image of Bronya pushing her face to be visible on Seele's outer stomach is pure gold. Imprints on belly is too hot.

Posted by Inari 1 year ago Report

Fatedmeal this is simply the grandest story you've written so far. You managed to perfectly capture my precious raccoon girl Stelle wacky dominant personality to the point I inserted myself into March's shoes while I was reading. And man your version of Stelle is a brutal vore fiend, especially with that Kafka love reveal and March being heartbroken in her final moments. That part hit me to the point I would take Himeko's lesson and avoid Stelle.(Thankfully I have Asta to fallback on.)

As for the rest of the story it was written in amazing vivid detail. Himeko's warning and eventual acceptance of March being prey and stealing her room, Stelle texting pic of her doughy abdomen and stomach, Bronya and Seele cute roleplaying, and the Genshin references! I even love the tidbit of Stelle eventually coming after Himeko for ownership of the train. (Which could make for a great future story.) My favorite scenes were Stelle devouring March in the streets which you written in vivid detail. The stomach kiss March got while steadily digesting, and of course the gust of wind giving Serval a full view of Stelle's meaty cake backside!
10/10! Happy Birthday to our train princess turn raccoon fat! Also rip Yanqing~

Posted by Fatedmeal 1 year ago Report

Thanks! It wasn't only me. The story idea was pitched to me for this art trade and I tried to fulfill it to the best of my ability. And I might have to agree, if I were to meet Stelle and she acted like that...maybe I would keep my distance from her.

...

Maybe.

...

And thanks for listing out all the scenes that you adored, which is nearly all of them. Let's me know that I'm not missing the throbbing beats when it comes to making a story organic and bringing the reader to the edge of their seats digestion. A pretty eventful birthday for the photographer who ended up frozen on Stelle's frame.

Finally, yea...there is no saving Yanqing. You don't even need me to write a continuation of this piece to know that.

Posted by MrPurpleWhite 1 year ago Report

oh my god you HAVE to do more willing, non fatal prey like with Seele and Bronya here, that was SO GOOD.although, your usual cruel pred writing was even more fantastic than ever as well. so hard to choose!~

Posted by Fatedmeal 1 year ago Report

I have to admit, there is a growing appeal within me to do some non-fatal stuff. Especially as it opens up more dynamics. I'm not sure how gentle the scenes would be...knowing my writing...but ifwhen I write more non-fatal scenes, I hope that you will find enjoyment in them as well.

Thanks for the comment.

Posted by WoreHouse 1 year ago Report

While I was reading this, it spoiled the impression a little that March, until the very end, thought that Stelle was just playing with her, while she was digesting her food for real. It would have been a lot hotter if Stelle had gotten March to agree to go on the full tour willingly by teasing her and using her preyish tendencies against her. If she herself did so her prey would want to be digested in her merciless stomach along with other garbage, and only in order to become additional padding for the chest and butt of her love. Whose assets will be played with later not by March, but by her main rival. Mmm~
I was a little sad that the girl was simply deceived :(

But otherwise, your artistic descriptions of everything are excellent as always. There's nothing to add here!

Posted by Fatedmeal 1 year ago Report

True, but I think the commissioner was quite smitten with the idea of March being submissive enough to fool herself. Thus, that is what they desired me to write.

At the very least, those little nuances can always play in our heads.

As for the second portion of your comment, thanks for the compliment about the descriptions in the story.

Posted by WoreHouse 1 year ago Report

Oh, this plot twist is part of the commission. Okay then :(

Just such perfect descriptions (I love aggressive, powerful stomachs and mean preds), but this little detail while reading sometimes knocked me out of the pleasant immersion in what was happening on behalf of the prey. March just loved Stelle so much and she was such a submissive prey that I think that if Stelle had teased her well and played with her, March would still have agreed after several hesitant refusals, even clearly understanding the final consequences. In this sense, I really like the scene with Himeko where she asks about March's willingess. Perhaps she would even come to the rescue if she saw the girl's struggle and cries for help, but realizing that March was not even trying to get out and was wasting the last remnants of precious energy on masturbation... she simply left her alone with her dream. Mmm... amazing ~!


I'm a little sad that you have so little content with the classic willing prey and fatal endings (There are many ways to play out this seemingly simple scenario, but you get the idea)
I’m even more sad because, due to the fact that I live in one sad northern country, subject to all possible sanctions, I can’t even make a commission from you, even though I physically have money. And here there are so many wishes - an alternative version of “A Gut Slut Writer’s Fate” with Sasha Alvarez, and for this particular story I would like to see the scenario described above. Eeeehh :(

Posted by SpamMeister 10 months ago Report

Amazing story, but it did make me sad, lol! I just want March to be happy!

Posted by Assriel88 9 months ago Report

I must say i do feel a little bad for march