Posted by doomed 9 months ago Report

it has the same energy as the firsyt

Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report

Well, I hope the first had good energy then...

Good to hear I kept Sophie's character intact though ^^

Posted by IddlerItaler 9 months ago Report

Sophie's reaction to the girl asking if she could eat them was funny. Her distrust was probably well-motivated, too. The wristband system sounds like something that could be exploited - take off your wristband, get your prey's guard down, eat them and put the wristband back on. But heh, that's security theater for you.

"Drugs that make the prey digest before they're even in the stomach" has definitively the quality of man-made horrors beyond my comprehension. It's certainly an interesting idea and something I could see being produced in a "vore is legal" world, but it doesn't sound like something too comfy, what with the risk of the prey just snapping during sex, and god help them if they get cold feet. I know it has anesthetic properties and all, but paradoxically I felt way more at ease reading the Eleasha vore scene even if she's the one who suffered more.

And a twin getting off to their sibling's digestion was rather hot.

Pffft, the >.< as scene separators were cute.

Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report

I admit, I never thought too closely about the wristband rules and how people might exploit them. Her hesitance was mostly her being concerned it was a trap, but also ins some part influenced by her backstory. (not that I mentioned that in this story) Since Sophie was raised in a place where her family and community were, suffice to say, not big fans of vore/predators, that's not something she would expect someone to just... walk up and ask for, so her background would probably make her more skeptical of the offer than others even before worrying about criminals or pred-on-pred predation.

The drugs... egh... yeah, they were a fun concept to think of and play around with, but the idea of taking those makes me shudder. But I'm not exactly the target demographic, given I prefer being on the nomming side of things over the nommed. There's certainly appeals; giving first-time preds an easier time, making the usually painful process painless for the prey, reducing potential pred guilt, or just making the digestion process smoother and easier. The people normally taking it would be someone with a pred planned, so they could get the fucking out of their system beforehand and make the big day all about them as a meal... but in this case, they really did things backwards thanks to Eleasha's nervousness. The less willing twin getting the smoother, gentler digestion while the more willing twin getting the full experience of fucking and digesting in her pred would have been better for both, but Eleasha wanted to leave herself open to backing out, and so the twin that wanted it all couldn't take it and the one that could take it didn't want it...

Gotta love gutsluts getting off to others getting the fate they lust for, them being sisters is just a plus~

Thanks! I always debate what fits best as that little separator to keep the disposal from the people not into it, and I think this one was one of my favorites so far.

Posted by IddlerItaler 9 months ago Report

Willing preys must be a bit of a culture shock, then. I suppose she'll eventually get used to them. I didn't read the previous story but the beginning mentioned two previous willing preys.

"so the twin that wanted it all couldn't take it and the one that could take it didn't want it..."

Sounds like the main hurdle of this drug. The gutsluts won't need it and the unwilling preys are not going to brainwash themselves into accepting vore, most of the time; though people like Eleasha exist and this drug could have its niche use for them. And there's darker uses that would probably also make one shudder... Remember when in another story, someone jokingly thought "Are my survival instincts malfunctioning?"

I'm more of a prey player, personally. And digestive aids are cool with me, as is the pred exercising some mental control on the prey, though I prefer for the prey to remain in possession of their faculties (or at least be able to recover them), and I also like the freedom to just jump in the throat of any cute pred you meet without days of planning. So I share some of Sophie's initial skepticism.

Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report

Willing prey might be something she's encountered, maybe even before she came here, but not people being so open and direct about it. Susanne in the previous story took her to her room, got her drunk, and then made a move, so it was a much slower and more intimate process... and the unnamed dude in the meantime, who knows how that went. I don't.

Yeah, it's a drug more for people that are into the idea of getting eaten than into the actual experience... who knows, maybe it might get an audience with rich people, and that'd be enough to make the RnD worth it. The possible illicit uses... lets not even think of those. Don't need more nightmares to add to the one this drug already is -n-

I think I agree with... all of that, except the being a prey part. Definitely prefer being able to be spontaneous over deciding to eat someone and then having to wait a week, too. Part of the reason Sophie met them when they were already ready to go rather than being the pred they'd planned all along, honestly.

Posted by TMVore 9 months ago Report

Such a lovely story, with capitalism running rampant in our world, I found myself suprised that sponsored prey isn't more commonly written.

I like this one. It still holds a bit of innocence. If I would expand on the thought, let's say, Tim Burton would be the only one to bring my version to the big screen. Lol.

Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report

Yeah, given the amount of youtubers etc. that you see getting sponsorships, you'd think someone getting sponsored to get gulped would be more of the thing. Though I guess most people that see sponsorships are too busy skipping to the video to think "What if this happened with vore"

Glad you enjoyed it! Though on the note of "things people don't normally think about" I have to say that thinking what producers would make good vore movies is definitely something that never crossed my mind.

Posted by TMVore 9 months ago Report

Well, Tim Burton already touched the subject in beetle juice.

Lot of movies have some vore. One of the nightmare on elmstreet, killjoy 3, mostly horror movies I guess xD

Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report

I don't watch enough movies to know I suppose

Though I do know that Men in Black is on the list

Posted by TMVore 9 months ago Report

O yes, totally forgot about that.

Posted by gva274 9 months ago Report

This is great, excellent work!

Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

Posted by Randomdude5 9 months ago Report

I was wondering how the work on this story was progressing. Posting it shows that it is completed.
Unsurprisingly, Sophie is enjoying her time at the resort. It makes sense for Sophie to use the best sunscreen, because her pale Irish complexion would probably make her vulnerable to sunburn. I also like how Sophie gained weight from eating Susanne. A whole human is a lot of calories. Those calories have to go somewhere. While Sophie wouldn't inherit Susanne's money, it makes sense that Sophie could loot all the cash that Susanne brought with her to the resort. Maybe she could use her card for awhile before it got frozen.
IddlerItaler has a good point. Preds could take off their wristbands to trick prey, and it would be hard for the resort to have a system for dealing with that. Maybe security could kick people out of the resort if they aren't wearing their wristband, but that would punish forgetful people. Maybe the rules could be harsh against preds for not wearing their wristband, but IDK.
I disagree somewhat with this line here: "As… stimulating as a thrashing prey was, it was always best not to show a scene like that in public; not that anyone could make a pred throw its prey up, (baring some VIPs of the world) it’d just be super awkward for everyone involved. " I think that if a resort had enough security, and enough less lethal restraint options, they could force a pred to spit up their prey, but that would take a lot of effort. It would also depend on the laws. In a sensible world, the authorities would do what it takes to save someone and punish a pred, that ate someone unwillingly. However casual fatal vore worlds are fun, and in some the preds are protected by laws. I guess this is just a casual vore world, where regular people are not worth rescuing from a pred, but a VIP would be.
I like Sophie's apprehension when the twin approach her, and ask her to eat them. There is the motto: "If it seems to good to be true, then it probably is." Who knows what tricks preds, and/or scammers think up to try to trick or eat someone.
I like how the company uses vore in the sponsership of their product. IRL many companies spend lots of money on advertising, so in a modern vore setting, it makes sense for it to happen. They want the public to know about their product, and are willing to spend money to do so. The side effects of the product are severe, so taking it is like making a decision that can't be undone. "No turning back." so to speak. I assume that there is some government regulation of the product, so people have to be adults to buy it, and it should come with warnings and disclaimers.
Some other things are like in the story are how Sofie thought Eleasha was ticking many boxes for being a good prey. I also like how Sofie wants to play with her food before eating it. I liked the detail about how Sofie easily carried Eleasha to the bed, since predators carry people in their stomachs. When Sophie was finally swallowing her, I like how Sophie pushed Eleasha's head down between her arms. Little details like that where the body position makes sense really help. It makes sense for her to be swallowed head first too, since Eleasha isn't going to enjoy the pain. After Eleasha is digested, it makes sense that a horny girl like Tamecia would want to have sex with Sophie, since this is casual vore setting. I think pelvic fractures are rare, and it shows how much Tamecia's body was weakened by the drugs she took. That reinforces how scary it could be to take those drugs and not get eaten.

I hope this was quality feedback. I am looking forward to what story you get around to finishing, and posting next.

Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report

Ha... yeah, I have no clue at all (except that wedding) why this one took me so long... but it's done now and that's what matters!

Glad you liked the sunscreen note, if I keep doing stuff with Sophie (and I do have a few more ideas) I plan to have her get a little more tanned each one... not that the reader can see her for that to matter but I like the thought. On the weight gain note... I can't stand vore where the prey just gets digested out of existence, that's half the reason I started putting disposal into my stuff. Give me weight gain, or disposal, or something, just don't have the prey vanish into nothing. And Susan deliberately left all her money and things for the pred that ate her, so it only makes sense for Sophie to of course enjoy them to the fullest~

The wristbands thing... yeah, the idea was that not wearing it would get you kicked out, but I honestly have no idea how the resort would find the preds without them... they'd basically have to just catch you with a full belly and a bare wrist, or have some big-brother level face-tracking going on... either way, Sophie follows the rules.

The line on letting prey out was kind of establishing what kind of casual-level the world had... basically, since digestion can often be more painful than prey expect, thrashing stomachs are common, making it hard to identify willing prey from unwilling. Seeing a thrashing belly makes people uncomfortable, sure, and might get a pred admonished by authorities for the disturbance, but they aren't going to make a pred spit out a prey unless that prey was someone important, or was screamingly-unwilling as they were eaten.

I feel like there's a whole possible rabbit-hole to go down with vore scammers and criminals... but that also doesn't seem like my kind of thing to explore, so I'm gonna leave that to other writers I think...

Realistically if a company was going to spend as much money as I implied they'd probably get a famous pred or prey in a studio somewhere and got that way... but who knows, maybe that costs more. I like the idea of Sophie unwittingly being turned into a massive social media ad for their product. On the note of selling and using the drug... I imagine it's less of a nightmare in a world where people commonly ingest and digest each other, but who knows. I don't! I'm mostly here for the noms~

Glad you liked the little interactions between Sophie and Eleasha, I had a lot of fun with those ^^
I guess I honestly could've leaned into that pair a little more, given that Sophie's probably used to more willing prey, so eating someone like Eleasha could've had a lot more of a predator rush involved... oh well, this way came out good. On the pelvis note; I wanted something to break on the way down, but most of the other (more logical) wide points of the body would be potentially fatal, and I kinda wanted Tamecia to live until the belly mulched her. So... pelvis. And yeah, it'd be a scary drug... the kind of thing you'd only take if a belly was going to mulch you soon anyway, hypothetically.

I enjoyed the feedback as always! Thanks for it ^^