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Hello, all you horny people! I have a dream... er, had a dream. And it had some good lines in it, so I spent the morning turning it into a vorny little story for you all. I admit, the plot changed a bit, buut it's been like five months since I wrote a catgirl so changes had to be made ^^
Little quickie story / distraction from bigger projects about a catgirl office worker that forgets breakfast and spots something far more appetizing than a cafeteria lunch~
As usual I probably missed important tags but also as usual you can totally add any I missed if you want
PS: Gotta wonder if crossing your fingers as you make a promise to turn that promise into a lie is a global thing, or just, like, an american thing... or even just a thing in my corner of the US... who knows.
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Posted by IddlerItaler 9 months ago Report
“Eh, we didn’t know each other that well, not like a mouse was going to last long here anyways. Enjoy your meal.”
Lily was cold-hearted. I can't help but find it a little off when demis or furries are given the sapiency of humans but the ethicality of hunting them remains the same as if they were their base animal, unless it's played for laughs like in Tom & Jerry or Elmer and Bugs Bunny. But I guess in a "vore is casual" setting, a human might as well be a mouse...
Philosophy aside, it's a fun and quick story that's pretty well-written (especially if you made all this over a single morning), and I can see how this is the kind of prompt that would come to you in a dream. Style-wise maybe there's imo a bit too much of name avoidance - lots of "the cat", "the mouse", "the goat", even "the orange-badged worker". Then again, writing fiction in third person where all the characters answer by "she/her" is tricky, I know that myself.
As for your question, in Italian "incrociamo le dita" (let's cross our fingers) means something to the effect of "let's hope for the best / here goes nothing".
Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report
I guess I do tend to play to the idea of demihumans having the animal instincts of whatever they are, but the idea of it was also that, well, mice are small, and predators are a thing. Most predators go after smaller, weaker prey; meaning that a mouse girl, unless protected, probably wouldn't get far in their career before getting gulped. Not that Lily wasn't a cold-hearted bitch for not caring at all about the girl that just got eaten in front of her, but of everyone around, the mouse was the most likely person to be eaten before she advanced in the company. I debated mentioning some system by which management might protect smaller species with talent, but that wasn't too relevant here, cause with that attention-grabbing red hair (and the story's plot) she was just doomed to churn~
Yep, one morning's project! ...Had plenty of time to write, cause it woke me up two hours early and I was too full of ideas to fall back asleep. -_-
Name avoidance is absolutely something I'm guilty of... my writing tends to kind of follow the character's POVs, so until they know each other's names I don't like to have those names in their "thoughts". There was originally going to be a moment of Stacey learning her prey's name, either by that cold-hearted goat Lily saying it or by asking for it, but none of the few ways I tried to write it in felt properly organic, and I ended up kinda liking the idea of her having zero clue who she just ate from start to finish. Thankfully since the story was short I didn't have to go too long with trying to find ways to not just sit here calling them "the cat" and "the mouse," especially with the prey's POV ending the moment her career did. :P
On the fingers note, yeah, crossing your fingers can be kind of a hopeful thing, hoping that things goes right... but crossing your fingers while making a promise/vow is a dishonesty thing, for when you don't plan to keep your word.
Posted by IddlerItaler 9 months ago Report
Ok, I see what she was getting at. In an RP I did, there were ratfolk species (both of the moe and anthro variety) and they had a similar deal as goblins - short lifespan, fast breeders, usually poor living conditions, small and frail individually. I can see the more opportunistic predators trying to go after these species, both by the logic that they'd be weaker and that their lives would be worth less due to being shorter anyway (Relevant comic).
As for how they could survive, besides for protection programs, I guess they could seek safety in numbers, befriend stronger predators or act as bait for them (I think DoreiRin's OCs have such a dynamic), or threaten to revolt if every single ratfolk/mouseperson employee is treated as little more than walking refreshment. Though, in the RP I mentioned, at least some ratfolk embraced that role and there were entire ratfolk-run restaurants where you were served... you guessed it, ratfolk.
Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report
The idea I'd had for protecting them in a larger company like this was somewhat simple: hierarchy is based on seniority, and preds would mostly be eating lower ranks or occasionally their own rank. So if a new hire had a lot of promise or just friends in high places, they could basically get "sponsored" by a higher ranked employee and get a little border on their badge to reflect it. Like, this mouse has a red badge but a green border through a sponsor, so treat them as a green-badged-employee when you think about eating them. Sure... there might be some high-tier preds just reserving their meals that way too, but it would save some talented lives, and encourage prey to work harder, since they'd have to prove their worth or stay on the menu~
Posted by TheUltimateShrub 9 months ago Report
Very nice! Such a polite mouse, too. You love to see it.
Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report
Glad you enjoyed. ^^ Gotta love a prey realizing there's no escape and doing their best to just let it happen
Posted by Randomdude5 9 months ago Report
I don't know why I like this story, but I guess I will try to explain.
I like how casual everyone in this story is about fatal vore. I also like how the company is fine with employees eating other employees. I assume that the company can easily hire replacements, otherwise a dwindling staff might be a problem. It might make sense for the company to provide cheap food to its employees, if enough of them get eaten whenever a pred is hungry.
I think it is kinky that the goat is fine with the red headed mouse girl being eaten, and even devalues the mouse's excuse as to why she shouldn't be eaten. I even like the reasoning that Stacey gives for why the mouse girl should keep her clothes on. I just enjoy a casual vore setting where everyone is nonchalant about someone being eaten. I know it doesn't make sense, but it is kinky to me, so I like it.
Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report
Casual vore is some of the best vore, no need to feel awkward about that ^^
Thinking of how they replenish employees, I like the idea of the company just keeping a stack of resumes around, and just replying to enough to keep a constant stream of new employees coming in the door to match the number going back out the sewers. Best case, find some hidden talent. Worst case, well, you already figured they'd get eaten. :)
Lily was mostly provided with my dream, honestly, and she was a good touch. The idea of the prey trying to buy time by being vague about their project only to be totally shot down by someone that knew what it was was a moment I just had to include. The clothes were a fun change from my usual stuff too, a few indigestables make a nice addition to a disposal scene... but most of my stories strip the prey before eating, since those stories are more intimate. This one was just a cat grabbing lunch, so why bother stripping her meal down~
Posted by Perodian 9 months ago Report
I take it that red years are too inexperienced to be off the table for eating, and green badges are probably protected, but what about orange and yellow? Can they be eaten without the company making a fuss?
Posted by PaperWriter 9 months ago Report
My thought was that people could eat others at their rank or below. Obviously preds would be encouraged to eat red ranked prey, but an orange employee can eat another orange employee without the company really caring; yellows could eat reds, oranges and yellows; and green ranks can kind of eat whoever, though obviously eating people as experienced as other greens would be somewhat discouraged. Dunno what penalties would come of trying to eat above your station but at the very least I imagine that the prey would be fully allowed to resist being eaten.
Posted by FluffV 8 months ago Report
The way you write your stories… I love it. Stacey makes for such a great pred and I see there is a sequel for this too :P
Posted by PaperWriter 8 months ago Report
Thank you! That means a lot to hear!
Not just a sequel! This little random inspiration turned into a trilogy ^^
Posted by FluffV 8 months ago Report
A trilogy? Okay, that was not expected but a nice surprise!
Posted by PaperWriter 8 months ago Report
Oh, it wasn't expected by me either ^^'
Just kinda started writing and ended up doing a story a day for three days... all about this length, but I'm still happy about that.
Posted by FluffV 8 months ago Report
You write each of these in a day? When inspiration hits… that’s impressive. I’m glad it happened. Stacey makes for a great pred >:3