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June receives a mysterious invitation from an even more mysterious sender, inviting her to attend a clandestine gathering like out of Kubrick film. But June's not the only one with an invitation, there might be familiar faces all around her, hidden behind their masks...
This is a sequel to my story Date Night and the 14th chapter in the Worth a Shot series.
Also, CONTENT WARNING: this one contains some nasty stuff. Figured I should include this near the top of the post. I ended up including some stuff that I never thought I would in this chapter.
Oh god, I think this is the longest chapter yet--and I hate writing long chapters! The truth is this story is kind of a mash up of two story ideas I've had for a long time (June meets with a shrinky cartel, and Nate and Becca attend a masquerade,) that always felt too high concept to introduce before, and now that it finally felt appropriate to use them, I realized that maybe they were a bit too similar to exist as their own separate stories.
Still, after finishing this, part of me kind of wishes I'd kept them each as their own thing, given how long it turned out. I feel like I really had to rush the pacing along in parts just to keep this from growing out of control. I feel so frustrated when one of my stories extends over twenty pages...and this one is over thirty!
But maybe it kind of works...this is sort of the big crossover story that leads us into the next act of the story, and almost every single character from the series makes an appearance, which I think is a first for Worth a Shot.
I do fear this is maybe a bit of shark jumping chapter, but hopefully you all don't feel that way. I don't think there'll be many chapters like this in the series, but I felt I needed to do this at least once to set up some of the things I have planned. Still, we're about as far from the cozy slice of life feel of the early chapters as we can be with this one...
Also, if you're wondering what happened to Judith, don't worry! She's still conducting her investigation in the background, and she'll reappear in a chapter or two...
Anyway, hopefully you guys can bear with me on this one, and maybe even enjoy it. I just feel a bit too frustrated to view it objectively right now I think, and I hope it's not as bad as I fear it is.
But please, as always, let me know what you think! Your comments are always so fun to read, and they're honestly quite helpful for giving me ideas of what to write next and what I can do better.
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Posted by Cassss 9 months ago Report
best one yet. well done.
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
Glad you think so! I feel like it's definitely my most ambitious story so far, but I'm still not sure how I feel about it myself.
Posted by johnnyboy246 9 months ago Report
wow! great read, maybe a bit dark for me, like fuck li na's story was definetly a bit to sad for my liking, along with the whole human trafficking thing. but still i liked it ^w^. its also definetly nice to see how you expand your universe and how depraived and cruel it can be. i mean honestly at this point, i've kind of given up on the idea of nate a becca having any sort of happy ending seeing how cruel and unforging this fucked up universe can be, aswell as how they probobly dont deserve a cute ending anyway XD (and obviously the manhunt and cheating that's going on with nate kinda fucks him. not to mention the a part of me praying that becca gets the punishment she deserves, cuz lord know's that would be satisfying)
also i dont know how you did it, but i somehow hate the rich even more now. like i really wana see a story about a rich girl getting what she deserves now >:)
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
Yeah, I may have gone too far in a few places. To be honest, Nate's horror at the scene playing out at dinner kind of mirror's my own when writing it lol. I really needed something to break him, so I tried to conjure up some seriously grisly shit.
But I think I became a little too fixated on what would be "realistic" in a situation like this and lost sight a little bit of what would be erotic to actually read. Basically tipped things a little too far in the horror direction...which I think works for what I'm going for for this chapter, but doesn't make for a very fun vore fic to read haha...
Posted by johnnyboy246 9 months ago Report
Yeah, I mean if I'm being honest I've always been a more emotional person, so I definitely found it a bit more disturbing and uncomfortable, and even a little hard to keep reading at times, and even a little hard to view as erotic. But I still enjoyed it on a morbid curiosity level. And sorry if I sounded a bit to jaded with the whole giving up on Nate a Becca but seeing as how cruel and deprived things are getting in this series it's just really hard to imagine things getting any better for the two. (Or at least things getting less depressing XD)
Also lastly I know it's just a matter of time before Naomi and Leah kick the bucket,cuz Becca is Becca, and Amy is I think seeing Naomi as less of a person? (even if I hope that's not the case because she seemed rly sweet with the two) but I think those two are so cute together ;w;. Like I know that basically every tiny in this universe just gets a horrible ending but I so ship these two together >w<
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
Everyone always seems convinced Leah and Naomi are doomed (which I guess is fair, since like you said none of my shrinky characters have really gotten happy endings so far,) but I wouldn't totally write them off yet.
More so than any of my other characters, I really don't know the fates of those two little shrinkies. Because they kind of exist on the sidelines I tend to make up their plots on the fly--even the kiss in this chapter was added at the last second. So who knows, maybe one or both of them will make it to some kind of happy ending in the end...but I can't promise anything either way.
Posted by Kabei 9 months ago Report
You keep putting out these amazing stories! Always puts a smile on my face when I see an updoot from you :)
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
Thank you! It makes me feel good knowing there are people excited to read my silly stories haha
Posted by AlbertKwon9182 9 months ago Report
Nate now second-guessing his giantess vore fantasy, because of Amber's party trick (I did not quite know how to summarize that, but it seems like a neat party trick so) and Becca kindly comforting Nate that she can take a break from eating shrinkies if it is for Nate? Character development/interaction is going crazy here. Great work as usual!
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
I think Amber's trick is the straw that breaks the camel's back for Nate, but he probably would have cracked regardless at the dinner scene...up until that point, shrinky swallowing was just something cute girls in his life did every once and a while, to see an entire party of creepy masked rich people chow down really hammered in true horror and cruelty of the act.
But even if he realizes it now...is it too little and too late?
Posted by AlbertKwon9182 9 months ago Report
So true! Really look forward to see what happens from here. Also, I forgot to mention that June and Rosa are great. Their character dynamics are seriously a one of a kind!
Posted by zargein 9 months ago Report
It hurts!
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
What hurts specifically lol? *dons doctor's garb*
Posted by zargein 9 months ago Report
It makes me scared every time I read these, but I keep reading! And seeing nate have the same reaction I do makes me feel even more scared. Those poor people. So much pain. It hurts!
Posted by Razorwind1 9 months ago Report
Forgive me for being gross but it would be awesome if the next time we see Becca, you go into detail about the massive bony turd shes gonna have to drop from her buffet here. I mean Jesus 8 shrinkys is going to hurt.Would also like to see her actually feel bad for what she's doing to them, even if its out of love for Nate. But I guess shes just like that lol. Also kind of sad how June finally got to see what shes doing to shrinkys and still being unfazed. Happy that she let Rosa out and actually seems concerned about her but still sad to have her realize her stomach is essentially a blender to these people and not want to stop. Also fucked up to piss on them before being flushed but I love the dark writing. I guess June will finally get whats coming to her soon, from the way it ended though. Great story.
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
I probably won't go into detail describing it, but maybe Becca will make a remark about it or something. Then again you never know, I think last time I told you I'd NEVER write a scene describing half-digested shrinkies puked up...and then I went ahead and wrote it into my next story XD
And yeah, Becca doesn't really get off on the cruelty of what she does, she just doesn't really consider the perspective of the people she's eating, it's just fun for her. If Nate had told her about the circumstances of the people she ate this chapter, she probably would've felt really sad and shitty about it.
The thing about June is that she's all business. She accepts some of the cold realities of what she does as a necessity. It's funny, I get a lot of comments about how evil Amber is, but I think objectively June is probably the most evil main character, since she does what she does solely for profit and causes the most misery in the world...it's just not as obvious because she's not an antagonist to the other characters.
Posted by Razorwind1 9 months ago Report
The regurgitation of shrinkys is so rare in vore in general, but almost everytime I see it its a work of art. Thank you for writing it and not sparing the details of how it would look and giving both Rosa and June an actual (Firsthand in both their cases)of EXACTLY what the both of them have been doing to people for money. Its also interesting how you view June too. Ive never seen June as cold and businesslike. Maybe a bit cruel and dominant like when Rosa starts trembling a bit after she sees June eat someone and threaten her a bit but not someone who enjoys suffering. She always came across as a "jaded" individual to me, like at the end of her intro chapter she shits out the shrinky and starts thinking about how girls that looked like her used to bully her. IDK maybe I just have hope for people lol. Very excited to see what you do with those two going forward. Rosa basically had her worst nightmare come true, so Id love to see how that effects her mind and personality going forward. I really cant see her shaking this off. I really want to see how June is going to respond to Rosa going forward as well. I can see her feeling bad about what she put her through, but just not knowing what to say. Or hey maybe she just doesnt care at all, only you would know. Lastly, since June got a big payday, what is she gonna do now? And even if June considers Rosa a partner, what does Rosa get out of it? Does June pay her? Or is her payment not getting sent to where she just went this chapter? Is Rosa really going to accept belonging to June for the rest of her life. Sorry for the long comment but Im just so invested in this lol. Also aprreciate you responding to these comments. Thanks.
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
It's not something I ever really go into in the stories, but I imagine that June has an account set aside for Rosa that she puts some percentage of the profits into. It's probably not a fair split, but it's something.
Of course, Rosa doesn't really have much opportunity to access it on her own, and if she wants to buy anything for herself, she has to ask June to debit from her account and make the purchase for her.
Posted by blab123 9 months ago Report
Another great story from you, probably one of my favorites from you, if not THE favorite, which was honestly really surprising given how quickly you've been putting out these past few stories. Despite the length, it keeps a steady pace the whole way through and included several memorable moments and scenes without feeling confusing or bloated. Also, as a big F/M enjoyer, seeing not just one, but several instances of male prey was a treat, especially given that you've stated your preference for F/F several times in the past. Of course, since it was such a long chapter, there's a lot to delve into beyond just that (prepare for an appropriately long comment).
One of the biggest highlights IMO was the brief moments of seemingly genuine humanity that showed up in each main character, with the possible exception of Amy since she already is clearly the most kind-spirited of the main cast. Nate's growing sympathies towards shrinkies thanks to his newfound knowledge of the shrinky trade, the drug trip Amber subjected him to, which itself was easily one of the other highlights of this chapter for me, as well as him witnessing firsthand the cruelty shrinkies were being subjected to by the other partygoers gives me hope that he may at least try to better himself in the future; of course he wont ever be redeemed in my eyes unless he does something as extreme as taking down the newly introduced international organization.
Amber's seemingly genuine concern for Nate after realizing she may have actually given him some trauma was unexpected to be sure, almost making me forget how much manipulative, horrible person she is, as was Becca's complete willingness to cut back on shrinkies the moment Nate suggested it; it doesn't make up for the cruelties the two of them showcased in past chapters, but at least demonstrates that they are still human deep down. Then of course was June's genuine concern for Rosa's well being, even if it was motivated almost entirely by her viewing Rosa as a key asset to her business; the two sequences involving the two of them were together the third big highlight of this chapter to me.
Speaking of June, I like how she's becoming more central to the overall plot again, even if it's to the detriment of the other characters' well being. After all, this is the second chapter in a row where she's made an enemy who is bound to track down both her and the other characters in an attempt to ruin their lives. She really needs to think more about the risks her decisions have before she makes them, and I can absolutely see her not making it out of this series unscathed, or even alive for that matter, and deservedly so. Speaking of those enemies, this new international organization is very interesting to me, and is unfortunately very realistic, as one like this would absolutely exist if there was a shrinking virus in real life; its legit just human trafficking made easier thanks to the trafficked humans fitting in your pocket. I'm morbidly curious to see how they plan to take down June, or to perhaps see them show up as the antagonistic force in a future series.
One last bit I wanted to touch on was the plant-based drug Amber used on Nate, as I found it to be a really interesting concept for two reasons. The first was that it allows for one of the main characters to "shrink" and experience the cruelties they've imposed on shrinkies themselves without actually shrinking, allowing the victim to gain much of the character development that would come from shrinking without constraining future chapters by actually having them shrink permanently, showcased perfectly by that very circumstance happening to Nate and it seemingly being the primary catalyst for his growing guilt and sympathies for shrinkies. The second is that it actually got me thinking about the origin of the shrinking virus, and that perhaps whatever plant this drug came from could be linked to it, and I am genuinely curious if you ever plan on covering said origin in future stories.
Overall, an exceptional story, and can't wait to see more from you!
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
Wow, first of all, thanks for the extensive feedback!
I'd glad to see some people are connecting with this story. It was definitely a bit of a risk, and I was really feeling pretty iffy about it when I uploaded it.
I'll say even though F/M often doesn't do much for me, it feels like a must in mass vore situations like this...like you can only suspend your disbelief so much that the characters will only ever encounter female shrinkies. Also, I don't know if I'd go so far as to say it's growing on me...but I've started to see the utility and unique interactions that can come from F/M interactions I guess? I have a story or two outlined that I realized worked/hit way better once they were switched from F/F to F/M, so you might see more from me in the future.
Like you observed, this is a chapter where pretty much all the characters are confronted by true darkness, and so we get to see their humanity a bit as they bounce off of that. This is always important to me to highlight occasionally because I feel these stories hit way harder when your preds still feel like people, and not just pure evil villains.
And yeah, June getting sidelined was sort of an unfortunate consequence of me accidentally getting obsessed with the pet storyline lol...it was all something I didn't plan that just kind of appeared organically and threw off my initial plans for the series. Originally we were going to see way more Nate/June heists or June/May storylines, but they all got kinda pushed aside. It kinda bummed me out when I realized that she'd almost disappeared from the plot, so it feels good to utilize her again.
June and Rosa's relationship was also something I was super excited to explore initially but I feel its toes also got stepped on a bit by the pet stories, taking away some of the uniqueness of it. So now when writing them I try to think about how their relationship is different from say, Amy and Naomi's. I think while it's far from an equal partnership, there's definitely more of a level of respect there. Amy might be kinder than June, but she very quickly stops thinking about Naomi as a peer. While I'd say June and Rosa are more like siblings or something, where June is the kind of abusive older sibling.
And that's really interesting stuff about the herb/drug! I'll be honest, I hadn't thought about linking it and the virus at all, but it's an interesting idea. I don't know if I'll ever delve into the origins of the whole thing, but that would definitely be an interesting place to start...
Posted by Kixkix 9 months ago Report
You continue to amaze me with the size of stories you make. Just whipping out (by my count) over a 100 pages in under a month. Part of the reason your my favorite. The other part is how you seem to make stories in this genre (the "shrinking virus genre" I'll call it) interesting no matter how many you make. Its really made me realize how many different stories could exist in this world. It's inspiring really... maybe one day when I stop being a lurker and make some thing of my own ill have to credit you.
Over all I love the parallel plots that existed in this story. Especially how they all touched each other without. Like how each character were in the same event, but it didn't reduce to everyone interacting. For example how every was at the auction. We saw that Amber and June sat together, but due to the size, we only have Becca and Nick see that Amber there from a distance. It really gave the masquerade scale that made it believable as a big event. Its a small thing but I appreciate how your writing is growing.
I like I think everyone really enjoyed the growth that Nick and Becca have had. It's a bit ironic in my mind, whereas nick is becoming my sympathetic to the tinies, we see Amy become a bit less in "pet pleasures", though still being relatively caring. Though ill be honest it didn't make too much sense to me that this would make Nick change his mind, I mean at Amber's party he also saw over a dozen tinies meet the same fate. Its almost just a class distinction that he sees? Or is it because its sheer magnitude? Either way still enjoyed the development and excited to see what you do with it.
On a side note it seems like Amy is the most at risk. Might just be a gut feeling, but having a relatively smart tinie, who in my opinion if she gets a chance she can count on, would absolutely sell Amy out. Whereas Amber, in my mind has the resources to not face any consequences, with her wealth and the two tiered justice system, she'll just lawyer up. Amy, Nick, Becca, and June do not have that luxury. And June! I'm feeling the nets closing on "the spider", between the investigation and the whats essentially the tiny trading mob/cult. She is looking like she is fast finding a lot of enemies... not that she might have some Karma coming her way. And on the new criminal element, it's interesting that they are so ideological in that way... I would have seen them more driven by greed? Maybe thats why they just hand them out, its not about the money, its for the act? Just some thoughts.
Oh on the drug (plant based one) I love it, I love how it was used in scene, I love furthering of world building, and it just leaves me with more questions. Like is it expensive? Where is it from, would it be sold locally, or is it just held by this group? Lots of questions... either way liked it in the story. I probably would have had a different reaction to then nick, I would have melted right in Amber's hands (though I have to say that Amber is my guilty favorite, I sort of stan for her lol, even if she's terrible). I actually been loving seeing how she seems to care for Nick, even if its still in her objectifying way. I know we likely won't see it, but I would have loved to see what her character growth would have been if Nick had reciprocated, regardless of the way it would have went. I know Becca is a favorite, and I get it just some thoughts.
Overall I loved the story, and this series has been my favorite probably ever in my life reading vore and giantess stories. Hopefully my comments didn't come across critical or offensive in any way. At the end of the day I really look forward to reading more no matter which way you take the story.
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
First off you had me double checking that I didn't call Nate "Nick" in this chapter, haha. Weirdly that was one of the names I almost used for him originally!
But thank you for the extensive feedback, and I'm proud to have lured you out of lurkerdom, even for one comment, haha.
As for why this event triggers Nate more so than Amber's party, I think it's a combination of factors. Mostly it's that going into this chapter, Nate is already on the verge of cracking, due to the guilt that's been building up over Amber's blackmail and the stress he's been dealing with since the restaurant heist incident. Learning about some of the darker realities of international shrinky trade and his drug experience with Amber contribute a little too, though they mostly just trigger the guilt and stress he's already feeling from the events already mentioned. The dinner is just the event that cements it for him, and I think even there the difference is Amber's party is "fun" with Nate mostly witnessing hot girls his age eating shrinkies, as opposed to the masquerade where he's surrounded by creepy masked older people who are preying on those less fortunate than them. You're right that Nate is stupid for not realizing how fucked up what he's been doing is until now, but he's mostly been in denial...he just can't deny it any longer.
Also I always love learning every character has fans! I get a lot of comments hoping Amber faces some comeuppance, so it's a fun change of pace to learn there are some out there rooting for her, haha. In a way they're all my babies, so there are things I like about all of them, so it's nice to know others feel the same.
Seriously, thank you again for your extensive thoughts, this kind of feedback is super useful to me to gage how people are feeling about the story thus far. I hope it can continue to meet your expectations!
Posted by GGO 9 months ago Report
Did I miss it, or do we not see Amber eat Addison? The story kind of got away from Amber towards the end. I was looking forward to seeing the mini-celeb get gulped down especially after Amber hyped it up earlier haha
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
Yeah I felt bad about it but this was one of those parts that got cut due to pacing and the overall length of the story...initially I'd planned to focus more on the experiences of all the little people who got eaten over the course of the story, but I quickly realized there was no way I could fit it all in. And with Addison in particular I couldn't find a non-awkward way to finish off that scene, I needed Nate to crack but I also needed to jump back to June for a bit, and since the story wasn't really Amber centric I couldn't justify just cutting away to her for a while in between.
It's the kind of stupid thing that I think ultimately only I care about it and most readers would prefer an extra page for that kind of moneyshot content, but I get weirdly frustrated once one of my stories goes over 20 pages.
Posted by GGO 9 months ago Report
Well, to me that sounds like she might not have been eaten yet! I can totally see Amber being too distracted by Nate's freakout to finish her meal. You know what they say for TV: If we don't see the death then they aren't dead! :)
Posted by akinata 8 months ago Report
probably your best one yet.
i did get confused at one point when june only swallowed the first twin. and afterward rosa found both twins inside june's stomach.
a shame we didn't get to have amber swallow her final prize. but as the focus was on nate and june it is understandable that we don't see what amber will do once both aren't there anymore.
Posted by TinyHunter 8 months ago Report
It happens really fast, but it is in there:
"“Wew...that's something...” June exhaled, quickly popping the second twin into her mouth,
thinking it over. In a way, it seemed too good to be true, but also...it would be nice to not have to hustle
anymore. To finally just take the big payday make time for herself and her life. After one last suckle,
she sent the second twin down to join her sister with a hard gulp."
Just one of the many sequences like the Amber one you mentioned that had to be rushed or cut...it's why I generally prefer simple vore stories where there's just one pred and prey we can fully focus on.
You're the second person to bring up disappointment about the Amber scene though, maybe I'll have to find something to give people closure there, either as a short story or a little AI comic...
Posted by akinata 8 months ago Report
oh yeah indeed, i missed that phrase for some reasons :x
actually, making AI comics about non-written scenes sounds good.
(like when becca indulged herself with multiple tinies while nate wasn't there.)
Posted by Whymanamajeff 8 months ago Report
The pee scene towards the end is great! I love the whole nonchalant “they would’ve been shit anyways.” The implication is something you really excel at!
Posted by TinyHunter 8 months ago Report
The casual disregard for even the smallest dignities of shrinkies is definitely one of my favorite things to write.
Posted by TheWiking2000 8 months ago Report
Man, this is just great! I don't know how you keep on delivering gold at such a pace but you are indeed keeping on delivering gold!
I especially like the internal conflict with Nate here, in stark contrast to how trivially the matter is treated by Becca. That's partly why they make such a interesting duo. Like any story, it's about characters and their motives and you are really good at capturing that.
If I'm to select one scene that stood out the most; that would be Becca's fake indignation to having three dicks in her, refering to the shunken dudes she ate. That's just so her, and so sexy.
Alright, gotta' get to the next of your stories that popped up!
Thanks for writing and sharing, my man!
Posted by TinyHunter 8 months ago Report
One of the conundrums I have when writing this series is I want it to feel kind of real, and while I have a strong preference for f/f content over f/m, most of the preds in the series don't strike me as the type to have that same preference...in fact with Becca and Amy I think they would realistically prefer f/m if anything. I usually just contrive the scenarios towards my preferences.
So even if it's not totally my thing, it was fun to finally write that segment, because like you said, it's exactly the kind of silly bit Becca would play up like that. She can't help herself... :P
Posted by vl444 2 months ago Report
Definitely the best chapter so far.
Part of me was beating my head for nate suddenly growing a conscience but it makes sense giving the situation. But damn, we had the perfect opportunity to see what Beccas Limit really was for shrinkies.
I really hope they both end up together, they may be flawed and probably terrible people in actuality, but they just have such good chemistry
Posted by Ropopoyodel 2 months ago Report
So much of this series is amazing and this story especially.
The casual cruelty of June swallowing those tinies, and Rosa seeing the inside of June and directly experiencing those tinies was amazing.
The fact that it had no hindrance on June continuing her trade or eating tinies herself is amazing.
Also, I love the idea that eating tinies really doesn't mean anything to Becca herself. She's murdered multiple tinies and barely pulled any joy out of it for herself. It's just a thing that she does sometimes.
The idea that she has this pure love for Nate that originated from something so heinous is a fantastic concept.
I love that you did a story with Becca eating so many tinies but as an odd occurrence My only wish Is that there had been more focus on Nate rubbing Becca's belly and soothing her physical desires while that many people are suffering inside of her.
Posted by Ropopoyodel 2 months ago Report
Wanted to add, the concept of June defending tinies as people while ignoring the fact that she kills them in such a painful way.
It makes what she does somehow worse and she doesn't see that irony
Posted by Zabas392 1 month ago Report
Sure would be a shame if Amber caught the shrinking virus... XD