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Finally, after many months, ASoG is back! And this time we're... wait a minute, we went back in time? Team STRQ? SUMMER ROSE!?
Yep, this was the chapter I've been waiting for the most. This takes place many years ago as we follow Team STRQ going on a mission while Summer Rose hopes she doesn't have to reveal her deepest, darkest secret along the way~
We're very sorry for how long this chapter took to make. We've been very busy with IRL stuff but we're glad we got this chapter combat ready! Here's hoping the next chapter won't take another half a year to finish lol
With that said, as always, have fun!
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Posted by jyoster 4 months ago Report
I would like to apologize for the massive delay we had.
Something that I should inform to anyone curious, in the time since the last chapter, I have since gotten a job. So that ended up delaying the process of making the chapter as I got used to the new schedule.
But with this done, we should be able to get back into making other chapters. Though I can't promise that the next one will be out in say like a week or such, we still have to pick up the pieces from where we left off.
But in case you can't wait, and I don't blame you since the wait you were all forced to endure, I got a special surprise coming over at my gallery. I recall you all like my "bad ending" stories. Well, I'll stop for now and let you go and see once it comes up.
In any case, have a great day.
Posted by zorpman 4 months ago Report
Congrats on employment!!!
Posted by jyoster 4 months ago Report
Thanks.
Posted by Goldendevil21 4 months ago Report
This was a surprise to focus on Ruby’s mother instead of the main four girls but just want to say, still enjoyed the chapter despite these new characters.
Good job at the start laying out what each character looks like and a basic description of what their personalities are. Makes sense considering these four have been together for a while now and should know a bit about each other.
And do like the tease at the start with Summer stuffing herself with the cookie jar. A nice foreshadowing of events to come with her eating a Grimm.
The grammar is also great. Did not see many grammar errors in my reading.
Am not the biggest fan of using the exploding grimm for Summer to eat. Now, I get that the king kaiju was strong but still felt like the story was pushing the vore. How not even a literal explosion inside Summer’s guts did any damage to her. Though did love the part she ate Raven with the grimm. Am always a sucker for those accidental vore events.
My FAVORITE part had to be Summer’s gluttony for eating Raven when she asks to learn how Summer ate a grimm and her. First, what a cool way to show off the ability. Second, another amazing way to show Summer’s personality as she likes hanging out with people and this is one way to force someone to spend time with you. Third, just love how this shows Summer Rose’s darker side that without her future husband to come in and remind her not to give in to temptation, she really would have digested Raven. After reading jyoster’s alternate ending, can fully believe that Qrow and TaiYang would believe Summer’s lie that Raven simply left. That does line up with her personality in the show.
Though my only criticism is still the same criticism I have for most chapters of A Semblance of Gluttony. Still do not have a clear picture on how big Summer’s body grew. After she ate the king kaiju and digested most of it, still do not have a clear idea on how big her boobs are. Are they now D-cup where you can fit each one into a hand? Does her skirt rip in some places to make room for all that fat on her behind? When she walks, does she shift her ass cheeks more to balance the weight or does she walk normally? Was good to see them struggle to fit in the elevator. A nice call back to the start of the chapter to show how much Summer grew.
Also wanted Tai to be a bit more of a gentlemen here. Offering to have their team leader lean on his strong muscles as she carries all that weight from her meal.
Did love the ending where we went full circle to Ruby’s first vore in the story. That was a good way to tie this story to the rest of the series. Though similar to my complaints about the physical descriptions, wanted more on Ruby’s description. Does she struggle to get through the door to their house? Doe she knock over some furniture as she is not used to having this much mass? Doe she fiddle with her bra as it feels a little tight? How big exactly is her belly? The phrase, “although Ruby stood out the most thanks to her huge, bubbling gut as she sheepishly waved at him” Want more concrete descriptors with the characters. Is her belly the size of a large pumpkin? A beach ball? Are her baby cheeks even more cute with the added mass?
Would have also liked it Taiyang gave his daughters a hug. Squishing Yang into Ruby’s belly to tell them that they are going to be all right and is just happy Yang is not filling out her sisters form. Knowing from his wife telling him in secret just how close she came to eating their reclusive teammate.
Posted by jyoster 4 months ago Report
Thanks for the comment, glad to see you enjoyed the chapter for what it had.
And yeah, the size depiction is something that is hard to plan around in the moment. We'll try to be more mindful about it going forward.