Add to favorites
| Full Size
| Download
Uploaded: 10 years ago
Views: 2,828
File size: 40.54 KiB
MIME Type: application/vnd.openxmlformats-officedocument.wordprocessingml.document
Comments: 15
Favorites: 16
(~8700 words, F/m, Sphinx/human, sex, hard vore, multiple preds, pseudo-antiquity setting)
A young man stumbles into a cursed city, where he is told - and shown - exactly what his use is in the world.
I know hard vore is likely to turn off the vast majority of readers, and sex is likely to turn off the hard vore crowd, but I spent a long time tweaking this story to get it just the way I wanted.
Comment on Curses
Please login to post a comment.
Comments
Posted by 1ring42 10 years ago Report
While I did not enjoy the hard vore. I appreciate this story as a piece of literature a particularly liked the allusion to a robot uprising.
Posted by 4ofSwords 10 years ago Report
Thanks! I'm glad you liked that little allusion to the sci-fi trope!
Posted by 1ring42 10 years ago Report
it made my day.
Posted by unicorn 10 years ago Report
Well there is apparently a sphinx in this... I'll definitely have to read it ;)
Posted by unicorn 10 years ago Report
Goddamn, that was wonderful <3
Your writing never ceases to amaze me. And i love when your characters get philosophical... a sphinx is really the perfect outlet for that!
Posted by 4ofSwords 10 years ago Report
Thank you! It was fun to write!
Posted by ouphe 10 years ago Report
I enjoyed it, but got a rather mighty chuckle at the typo of "we are the divinity of the borders, the limes"
Citrus sphinx!
Posted by 4ofSwords 10 years ago Report
I'm glad you liked it! And actually it wasn't a typo, though I should have italicized it. It's Latin for 'border', but it carries its own distinct sense that's difficult to translate.
Posted by ouphe 10 years ago Report
Ah... lack of speaking Latin threw it off then. Not quite as silly as the idea of sprite-sponsored sphinx, but more wonderfully linguistic.
Posted by 4ofSwords 10 years ago Report
<grin> Yeah - that's actually a bit of a mistake. I started them off Latin-oriented, and then moved them more into a quasi greek/phoenician setting, but left that in. Ah well!
Posted by ouphe 10 years ago Report
The entire story has much more of that middle eastern desert bazaar feel to it, in my opinion. That was the setting that came to mind at least...
Posted by 4ofSwords 10 years ago Report
Hey, I'll take it. As long as it felt consistent and exotic, it's a win.
Posted by Ka-Atis 10 years ago Report
Ha ha the end. Really loved the end. The last line. I should have seen that coming.. but I didn't.. XD
And the idea with the 'curse' - What's a blessing in one context can very well be a curse in another. ;3
Posted by 4ofSwords 10 years ago Report
I'm glad you liked it! :) I was afraid I telegraphed the end too much - I went through about three revisions of how to present the information that builds up to it so it wasn't too obvious or just out of the blue.
Posted by Ka-Atis 10 years ago Report
Oh yes, I see, this is a challenge in writing. The author wants a surprising event, but since he already knows about it, it can be hard to find the right balance - It must be somewhat foreshadowed in order to be believable, but not too clearly...