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It's time for prom! That magical high school milestone where memories are made! Nate's only problem is he has multiple girls vying to be his date...you've got a difficult decision to make, Nate!
This is a sequel to my story "A Lesson in Love" and the 9th installment in the "Worth a Shot" series.
Oof, this is a long one! Sorry it took so long, I knew this was the next story I needed to hit on my outline for Worth a Shot as a series, and that it was going to be an Amber-centric story...but I just haven't really been in an Amber mood, and I didn't want to force it. Luckily I eventually found my groove and finished it up.
The next story is one I've been thinking about for a long time though, so hopefully it comes a little quicker.
Anyway, as usual let me know what you think! Your comments and theories are my motivation to keep writing! (And sometimes they even give me ideas =P)
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Posted by DrPerve 1 year ago Report
WoW just WoW, this is an excellent story looking forward to the next part!
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Thank you!
Posted by Kabei 1 year ago Report
I've been awaiting this update! As always you are a fantastic story teller, really appreciate the work you do man!
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Thanks! Sorry it took so long!
Posted by Kabei 1 year ago Report
No need to apologize, We appreciate you doing it all the same <3
Posted by randomuser13579 1 year ago Report
Oh god teenage drama didn’t expect to be ever interested in it.Although in my head I was thinking what if Nate would really give in to Amber.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Haha, yessss...I will trick you all into being invested in my trashy teen drama story with the promise of vore :P
Posted by muslone 1 year ago Report
I was excited to see you had finished another installment of “Worth A Shot” I always enjoy reading your stories. I guess this chapter was the first time we read anything about Nate’s Mother and or Sister although it being just a short mention it makes you wonder how they could be part of the story in more depth in the future. There are a lot of possibilities available with these additional characters.
It is very funny you touched on the young teenage mentality with Becca getting upset while Nate not having a clue as to what he did wrong.
AS I was reading further, I was like OMG! Now we have some drama and there will be hurt feelings between Nate and either Amber or Becca. As I was reading through Amber’s display, I couldn’t help wondering how this must be hurtful to Becca and how Nate’s decision will hurt and or anger one of them.
He will have a lot to explain to Becca no matter what. The anticipation as I was reading was intense.
I figured Amber had already thought Nate would say yes because of how self-confident she was. A display like this in public was sure to cause enormous emotions on both sides.
After thinking about it as I was writing this review, I wondered how I could feel empathy for the two girls as they both were horrible people treating those shrunken victims the way they did. I give you credit for bringing that emotion out in your story. At this moment they were just everyday girls at school living their lives without a care as to the victims they digested and absorbed into their bodies.
OMG! I was not expecting Amber’s response at all, and the tables were turned onto Nate all over again. I was disappointed in his decision, thinking what a moron. I’m sure this will not turn out as well as he thinks as Becca was really hurt.
The poor victims and what Amber put them through is why I was shocked as to how I could have felt empathy for her earlier in the day. Great job bringing those emotions out in your writing.
Again the brutality Amber has toward her victims is amazing and how vindictive she is with Becca. You end up caring for Becca even though she is also a horrible person.
Great writing and looking forward to more chapters.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Nate's mom and sister actually first appeared in the second chapter of of the series, "A Meeting with the Spider." That was a long time ago and I don't think they've ever reappeared since that first scene though, so it's understandable most readers probably don't remember them. I've actually had a May centric story in my head since the early days of the series, but it's one that works better further into the storyline so I've been saving it.
And yeah, I think you've touched on something that I'm definitely always aiming for in these stories--even though we the readers can view the girls' actions from the outside as objectively cruel/evil, I don't think they really see themselves that way. Like you said, they're just everyday girls living their lives...their lives just happen to take place in a crazy world where the social norms have been completely flipped around by an impossibly strange virus. The readers only get to follow them when vore is the subject too, but in-universe days and weeks go by where their lives are relatively normal, and they might not even think about shrinkies or swallowing them at all. (The exceptions maybe being Nate who is truly obsessed, and June because it's her job.)
I think that irony is one of the most interesting things for me to write about. That for the shrinkies, being swallowed means everything, but for the regular girls, it's just a fun opportunity.
Posted by muslone 1 year ago Report
I will definitely go back to the second story and read through again as there is one thing about your stories they are captivating and can live through the test of time. There are only a few writers I have read that can actually bring a story out as you do. I personally think it is about the story that builds the anticipation to the climax that matters not just the climax. This is why I like gentle as well as brutal scenes in stories.
I am obviously looking forward to this new development between Nate, Amber and Becca. I also wonder what would happen if someone either of them know closely would fall victim to the shrinking virus. Would they try and protect them or would they be ruthless and swallow them as any other shrinky.
Thank you for taking the time to respond to my comment
Posted by Animo24 1 year ago Report
Awesome story I really love Ambers cruelty in a way its really scary but cool and your storys never seem to disappoint they're awesome
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Yeah, my whole idea for her is basically just extreme entitlement. She's someone who has basically gotten whatever she wants, whenever she wants, her whole life. As such she doesn't really value the needs or wants of others, and in the rare chance that she's denied something she becomes, very, very vindictive.
Posted by Joe3e 1 year ago Report
Oh boy, two stories in a row!? Wonderfully written once more! I really like the new addition of Hana, someone else who hates Amber’s guts. I’m firmly on Team Becca and seeing Amber be soo smug in this one just made me ever more excited to see her downfall lol >:)
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
I would say that Amber and Hana are actually friends, but their friendship is very shallow and more based popularity/status than actual fondness for each other. Amber definitely crossed a line with Hana in this story, but she'll likely forgive her before long.
Posted by Hobby 1 year ago Report
Team Becca!
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
<3
Posted by akinata 1 year ago Report
it was enjoyable until the drama with amber started.
that went a bit hard.
the follow up felt a bit rushed.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
By "went hard" do you mean it came off as too heavy handed, melodramatic, or just was too harsh?
Posted by akinata 1 year ago Report
sudden and harsh.
the problem is the timing.
you made her act like a very detestable bitch, which made everything that came after sour, right in the middle of the sex scene instead of after he finishes it (which he should have instead of wanting to stop in the middle of doing it).
Posted by LazySWV 1 year ago Report
Without a doubt the best vore blowjob scene I've ever read! Thanks for writing so much from Maria's perspective and characterising her as much as you did.
The drama that the girls were dishing out and the cluelesness of Nate was so realistic it had me groaning all the way through. Despite everything though, he's a lucky guy! It was weird that he was willing to lie to Becca while also not coming up with a lie midway through sex with Amber though.
Nate should probably also see a doctor. Climaxing about three times that evening would seem appropriate for a normal teenage boy in that situation :)
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Glad you liked it! I actually kept worrying while writing it that I hadn't given Maria enough character or backstory, haha.
Posted by LazySWV 1 year ago Report
Oh by the way... would you ever consider Becca or Amber getting shrunk? I think you might have mentioned it before, and even if it became a non-canon story, it would be a great read imo to have an established character as prey.
One of my favourite stories is this one for that reason: https://www.deviantart.com/fs-the-voresmith/art/Wem-531963789
The author then decided they didn't want one of their main characters to die and redacted it, but the combination of knowing the prey along with just how *smug* she is makes it pretty great.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
I won't say it's totally out of the question for further along in the story, but role reversal usually isn't my preference.
Part of the thrill of vore for me is the unfairness of it, and so generally I want to see the "bad" girl win and the good girl lose. The less each side deserves what they get the more naughty it feels, I guess. I'm afraid it does make my content a little predictable though.
But again, I won't totally rule it out. Like you said, it could also be fun as a sort of dream sequence for either character, and an interesting way for them to reflect on what they've been doing to people and maybe grow as characters.
Posted by Animo24 1 year ago Report
I would really love to see nate in some kind of a shrunk position with amber that likes to have him as a pet or so because she knows he likes the swallowing of shrinkys nonetheless...
Posted by LazySWV 1 year ago Report
If I may make a humble request, please don't make it a dream sequence :)
It robs the story of any satisfaction imo. I read this one somewhat recently - https://giantessworld.net/viewstory.php?sid=13261 , and while it has an excellent vore description, it's immediately undermined by the prey waking up lol
Also, I used to be the opposite side of the coin for the unfairness part! I generally wanted the prey to be angry, fighting back and have a bit of dignity instead of perhaps crying, resigned, with a sweet undeserving personality. I care a little less about it these days, especially after a story called Roleplay (I can't find it on the net, but the characters were named Jane, Sean and Danielle). It was kinda horrifying at first, but then I guess I learnt to appreciate it in a different way that's hard to describe. Perhaps just simple innocence being taken? Still! The more dignified the better imo, like when you had one of the shrunk girls a potential olympian :)
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Ooh, I loved Roleplay, haha! One of my top stories of all time.
But yeah, it's a pain in the ass to find...occasionally I find the pastebin link posted elsewhere but never remember to save it, if I ever track it down again I can shoot you a link if you want.
Posted by LazySWV 1 year ago Report
Oh I've got it saved in a text file, just wanted to link it in case you hadn't read it. I can send it if you're looking for it over again
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Please do!
Posted by leriodenbron 1 month ago Report
I'd love to read it too, if you've still got it!
Posted by LazySWV 1 month ago Report
https://0bin.net/paste/sdZljup2#k2PMON0q+3CvfZZacvLO+tmM9TNXSxgmOzYPtuC18pB
Here you go!
Posted by leriodenbron 1 month ago Report
Thanks so much, great reference to this story!
Posted by VVVx 1 year ago Report
Nate may be the most dense person to ever exist.
Posted by VVVx 1 year ago Report
And he's the worst kind of liar too.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Yep, a true fuckboy through and through.
Posted by blab123 1 year ago Report
Finally got around to reading this, and I must say I never expected the romance plot to be so interesting (I typically don't give a hoot about teen/young adult drama). While Nate is certainly in made every mistake he could have, I still understand why he did them, which just shows how well written this series' characters are. At the end of it all, and despite Amber's new leverage, I can't help but feel like every time Amber shows up in a story, no matter what she does to try and force the opposite, Nate and Becca end up closer at the end, and I'm all for it (team Becca for the win).
Also, assuming you have no plans for any of the main characters to shrink (at least not anytime soon), would love to see more about Hana and her now-tiny boyfriend, regardless of what his fate is.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
That's an interesting observation that Amber's efforts usually end up backfiring. This time definitely is a bit different, because while Nate has not always been truthful with Becca in the past, this is probably the biggest lie he's kept from her, and the easiest one to expose...
And the Hana story is in the pipeline! I think maybe two chapters from now? I keep almost writing it then pushing it further out.
Posted by VortexFoodsTM 1 year ago Report
Finally got around to reading this one all the way to the end! Took me quite a while, but I apparently need multiple attempts to get through your stories... and I mean that as the highest praise possible! :D
This story too didn't disappoint. I think your "Worth A Shot" series is one of the best vore universes out there, and this is another fine entry. I'm Team Becca, but Amber is deliciously evil, and she really takes it to new heights (or lows?) here. Nate really fucked up bad this time, really curious to see how he is going to get out of this. IF he is going to get out of this. In any case I feel sorry for Becca though. She really deserves better than this.
The vore scenes and Amber's teasing are absolutely on point. I don't know why exactly, but Amber keeping Maria in her cleavage while eating her dinner and making her listen really got me like few other descriptions ever have. There's just something about the foreshadowing and the casual cruelty that makes my brain melt.
Going to move on to the other standalone stories and am eagerly waiting for the sequel to this! Oh, and thanks for the watch, by the way! :)
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Ha, finally I got my usual Vortex review!
And it's kind of embarrassing, I thought I was already watching you...I did my bi-yearly pruning/adding to my watchlist recently and was surprised to see you weren't there...my bad!
Posted by VortexFoodsTM 1 year ago Report
I'm the one who should apologise for holding out on commenting so long! ;) But I am catching up on that now.
And no worries about that, I constantly find that I forgot to follow someone. Especially the ones I have bookmarked anyway! :D
Posted by AnAccount 1 year ago Report
I should start off by saying that this was a very good read and I loved it. Predictably Nate is finally locked in to Becca, although lying about what happened is going to bite him in the ass. While I think almost every character obeyed very cliche thinking and the resulting plot was predictable as you mentioned, the climax was unexpected and exciting. Blackmailed consent was not where I thought we were going. Below I have some thoughts that were written after finishing the story.
It is so difficult to take any of the personal attacks or the implied value of characters' morality seriously when the basis of the story is that these characters murder people for pleasure.
When Nate calls Amber a "fucking manipulative psycho" it hits like confetti cannons and clown horns, because he just enjoyed watching her ram a poor tiny into him repeatedly and then send her to a tortured death. Really Nate? Murder is cool but blackmail is where you draw the line?
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Yeah, you may notice at this point that Nate is...not very bright. He thinks of himself as a good person, but actually has a very selfish worldview, like I think a lot of people do in real life.
Basically he's fine with what Amber is doing...until it affects him.
I feel like I should just state this because I've been getting a lot of these comments lately: my goal with this series is to write a love story between two people who feel real. Not two people you should be looking up to, nor necessarily the most evil people on the planet...just flawed regular people. I don't know if I succeed in this, but that's the goal anyway.
Oof, that came out wordier than I meant it to...sorry
And to be clear, this reply isn't intended as a rebuttal or attack, I love it when people share their thoughts and I think your take on that scene is totally valid, I just like to explain my writing process :P
Posted by AnAccount 1 year ago Report
You succeed in that they are very believable, and you've written this series wonderfully. It is the fetish that fails you. But hey, I'm having a good time.