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As usual, Amy gets wrapped up in one of Becca's weird activities against her will. But this time it's even worse, saddling her with a potential lifelong responsibility! Amy's a clever girl, but is she up for the task?
This is a sequel to my story "Promblems" and the 10th chapter in the "Worth a Shot" series.
Oof, another long one. But this is an idea I've just been fascinated with for some reason so I really ran with it.
I feel like it kind of meanders a bit as it goes, but that's because I changed my mind about the ending several times while writing it. I wonder if you can predict the ending while reading it?
Anyway, thanks for reading, and please let me know what you think in the comments! I love to hear what you all think!
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Posted by TMVore 1 year ago Report
Awesome, I really love longer stories <3
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Haha, I guess I get that from a reader's perspective, but they're frustrating for me. Means more time proofreading, and all I can think is "man I could've written a whole other half a story with these extra pages..."
Posted by TMVore 1 year ago Report
I'm thankfull <3
Posted by muslone 1 year ago Report
WOW! Loved the story, interesting reading the dynamics of the relationship between Amy and Naomi while poor April met her demise within this young woman. As Always your writing style is amazing.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Yeah for whatever reason I'm just utterly fascinated by the dynamic between Amy and Naomi right now, it's taking a lot of self control to not just write whole other story with zero real vore in it that's just about them navigating their new living arrangements.
Partly makes me wish I'd written it as a standalone story and not tied it into Worth a Shot so I could expand on it more without totally hijacking the plot.
Posted by muslone 1 year ago Report
You could write a standalone follow-up sequel to this story and it wouldn't hijack the plot at all. Side stories always are intriguing. Branching off to another arc of the story is always a good process as it gives you a breather from the plot and allows you the opportunity to develop characters away from the overarching storyline.
Posted by Dongers 1 year ago Report
Seconding the spinoff idea. Would love to see more of that dynamic.
Posted by LazySWV 1 year ago Report
Man, this is like the opposite of how I like characters acting in stories. I kept wanting Naomi to escape and tell someone about the murders! It's only on this point that our appreciation differs though, and I really appreciate the story!
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Haha, sometimes your preferences really confuse me, half the time it feels like you're rooting for the prey! :P
But I get what you're saying with Naomi. I was kind of trying to create a parallel between her and Amy. Though their personalities are pretty different, at their core they're very similar people--intelligent and always thinking out their next move rather than rushing into action. They're both characters who are constantly frustrated by their lack of agency over their lives, and I can see how it might be frustrating to see Naomi have the opportunity for an escape but not be willing to risk it.
But who knows, she hasn't totally given up hope yet, eventually she might find her opening...
Posted by Joe3e 1 year ago Report
Well worth the wait, it was nice to read an Amy centred chapter. While Becca is still my number 1, Amy is such an interesting character and it was fascinating to get to know her a little better and delve into what her life outside of the other characters is like. I really like Naomi too! I also feel like spending more time with the shrunk characters makes that eventual hungry moment hit harder, at least for me lol. I am certainly interested to see how this whole pet plot develops in the coming chapters! Well done again!
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Funnily enough while writing this I ended up growing to like Naomi a lot too. In my original outline she didn't make it out the end of this story, but I kind of grew attached somewhere along the way. Now I have no idea if she's sticking around for good or just for a few more chapters...I'll be in suspense with the rest of you.
Posted by TheWiking2000 1 year ago Report
I've finally caught up with this series and I think it's awesome! The psycology of the preds especially, and I'm now finding Amy becoming a bit of a favorite after this chapter.
The scene where she rushes up to her room, intent on eating Naomi, but stopping herself at the end, is one of the best lines of story I've read, I believe. Great, imaginative and captivating, indeed!
Thanks for sharing!
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Thanks! That means a lot coming from you since I've been a long time fan of your videos (I consider "My First Tiny" to be the best piece of vore content on the whole web.)
And yeah, that was a fun bit for me too. Amy has slowly become my favorite character to write because she feels the most like a real person to me. Trying to think about how she would respond to these crazy situations is always a fun puzzle for me to solve.
Posted by blab123 1 year ago Report
Really liked this chapter, though I will admit its less for what it included, and more for what it will lead towards. I always love it when a the predator and prey in a vore story have a preestablished relationship that has been fleshed out, at least a little, so seeing Naomi and Leah making it out of this chapter made me quite exited for what their futures will hold, especially since you've already said that you personally don't know whether Naomi specifically will make it out of the next few chapters alive. Regardless of whether or not Naomi lives in the end, her character being more and more fleshed out in future chapters will only add to the tension and payoff whenever she's in a precarious situation, and I'm all for it.
Posted by johnnyboy246 1 year ago Report
i dont recon naomi is gonna live long, because if amy keeps her then that's just kinda depressing esspecially if its for an extended period of time. and letting her go isnt a option, unless she develops something like stockholm syndrome and falls in love with amy
Posted by johnnyboy246 1 year ago Report
Also knowing becca, shes probably gonna drive leah to suicide before she gets eaten
Posted by VortexFoodsTM 1 year ago Report
Once more I'm late to the party, but I still don't want to forgo commenting on the newest entry in my favourite series of vore stories! :)
This is another great episode. I like how you are following the fate of this particular group of shrinkies now. It's always difficult to have the tinies be more than edible redshirts that get eaten at the end of every story, so carrying them through multiple entries is a good way to make their final demise feel a bit more... impactful.
And I also was very glad to see Amy be the focal character again. As I said before, I think she is perhaps your most psychologically nuanced character, and this time too I wasn't entirely sure what she was going to do. It makes perfect sense for her to annoyed at being pushed around all the time, and to be taking it out on tinies to feel better about herself. Will be very interesting to see if she descends further into this compensatory sadism or if she retains at least some of her kinder traits, and how her relationship with Naomi develops.
As for Leah, I guess the only thing we can hope for her is that Becca doesn't get bored of her...
Posted by TheRumblinger 1 year ago Report
Great series! I regret a bit that I can't read your stories on my phone - it would definitely be more convenient, but anyway, you are a really great writer, I'm waiting for the continuation ^^