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A Colleague helps with a Hangover By MultipleCacti -- Report

Chase has a bad hangover, and skipped his breakfast. Bad idea. luckily, one of his lovely co-workers can help him out.

2 posts within 2 months time, we're really setting new records here. And so close to my 2 year anniversary on this site as well. I considered holding out with posting this until then, but I decided that I love posting, actually, so sitting on a finished product just didn't feel right.

on today's menu we have: chubby girl. now I usually like to imagine most of my girls with a little chub, but this time I mean real chubby. Personally, I love chubby girls, especially as prey, and yet this is the first time I've sent one to their doom. I do tend to use a lot of very similar body types in my stories, so I hope you guys like this variation.

As per usual, thank you all so much for reading, and do let me know what you think.

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KyleWaterdrop

Posted by KyleWaterdrop 1 year ago Report

Fuck, this was hot~

MultipleCacti

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Thank you so much Kyle, I’m glad you agree!

pendingdelet25h2409bn4

Posted by pendingdelet25h2409bn4 1 year ago Report

Oh 10/10 I love casual cruel fatal

MultipleCacti

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Thank you! I’ve been getting more into it as well ‘cause it’s really fun to write. And also ‘cause it’s really hot

777c

Posted by 777c 1 year ago Report

I really enjoyed this, good job!

MultipleCacti

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

I'm glad you liked it~

Justsomeone

Posted by Justsomeone 1 year ago Report

Good story! And congrats on 2 years!

Vinagrinho

Posted by Vinagrinho 1 year ago Report

oh I missed this

swooddood

Posted by swooddood 1 year ago Report

Just wanted to say that this is super hot,,, I love seeing thick and busty slabs of girlmeat getting forcibly stripped and digested!!!!

MultipleCacti

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

You and me both buddy! I'm happy you enjoyed it!

Kelly

Posted by Kelly 1 year ago Report

Best shit love it !

MultipleCacti

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Thank you Kelly!

Kelly

Posted by Kelly 1 year ago Report

No thank you for writing !

MultipleCacti

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

<3

Randomdude5

Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

I enjoyed this story for a variety of reasons. I like how you used that Chase had a hangover to cause him to skip breakfast, and have a bad day. I like the detail about Nate giving Chase a cup of coffee. I guess it humanizes the story or something.
The details about how hungry Chase is, help set up the part for him to eat Layla. He doesn't do it randomly or for no reason, but because his body wants him too. The part about him swallowing the meat patty, and it feeling like it melted in record time, makes his quick digestion of Layla make more sense.
I like how he didn't immediately eat Layla, but chats with him, and this helps tell the reader what kind of person Layla is. I don't really like chubby girls as prey, but you write the story well, and higher fat foods can help someone stay full longer.
Chase going into a zombie like trace doesn't really make sense if I think about it too hard, but this is a vore story, and there are different levels of realism in vore, and this works fine. I like how Chase struggled in swallowing Layla too. I think that same size vore should be difficult, and preds should have to struggle to swallow their prey, unless they have experience, and the prey is smaller than them.
I like the detail about Chase stripping Layla as he swallows her. Stomach probably wouldn't like clothes, Chase wants to get the nutrients from digesting her as soon as possible, and clothes would slow that down. I also liked how Chase played with his meal while swallowing her.
After he is down swallowing her, Chase is nonchalant about it. I like how casual he is about turning her into food to satisfy his hunger. I didn't like the detail about her long hair starting to melt. Hair is resistant to digestion, and snakes can even digest bones, but they can't digest hair. I think hair should survive digestion to be either regurgitated, or disposed of in scat, but that is personal preference. Vore doesn't have to be realistic, so I shouldn't be concerned about it. I am just pointing it out because I feel like it.
I really like how Chase's boss Decker doesn't mind that he ate Layla, but is more concerned about not having a cashier. IDK why, but I like it when people are casual about someone digesting inside a stomach a few feet(or meters) away.
I wonder what would have happened if a customer had noticed that Chase had a woman in his stomach. IDK if they would have cared, congratulated him, or called the police. Would the police even care? Any of those options could have been fun, but the one you used of no one noticing worked fine.
The part about Katie talking to Chase makes me slightly want a sequel where he eats her too, but there are probably better story ideas.

Thank you for writing your stories. I said that I would get around to posting longer comments on other stories you wrote, but it took me awhile to get around to it. I hope to read more of your stories in the future or even discuss ideas with you, because that is something I love to do.

MultipleCacti

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Ah yes, I was wondering when I’d see one of these pop up from you. You’re completely right that it doesn’t really make sense for him to go zombie mode, but I just thought it’d be an interesting way to describe him losing his cool. I suppose I could have simply had him do it while he knew what he was doing, but I liked this more personally.
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Randomdude5

Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

I think the real issue with Chase going zombie mode is how serious your stories should take themselves. Not everything has to be realistic, and serious. Sometimes it is more fun to just do what sounds fun, or even add in slapstick. Being silly or ridiculous is fine, but the real issue with that is consistency. Bouncing from one extreme to another wouldn't feel right. It is up to you as an author to decide how serious, grounded, and thought out, or silly and comical you want it to be. You could make a sliding scale, and choose any point on the scale, and it would be fine. I am just pointing it out, because I feel like it.