Posted by funnymudpee 1 year ago Report

I like your plot. That's very interesting. Especially when Jesse and Cindy meet. Character's figure is good. There's nothing more sexy than a robust boy swallowing a plump girl. Only downside(just for me)of is Jesse only melted Cindy at the end. Not completely absorb her. But it's still a great work.

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Thank you for the compliments <3. To be honest I did consider continuing the story with Cindy's complete absorption, but that would probably have meant I also include a few scenes of Jesse going home and chilling out there, which I've done with other preds like 7 times already. Plus, knowing me, it would've taken me an extra week to add the couple paragraphs it would need, and I just really wanted to post something again.

Posted by Dudebro2092 1 year ago Report

I hope you have a happy new year! I enjoyed reading this and can't wait for Jesse and Randall to keep eating! It wasn't clear, is vore known publicly in that universe?

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

I'm happy you enjoyed it! And for your question, I imagined vore is not at all a common occurrence, with only a few people having heard of it before. it's just that most people don't really realize or care about Jesse massive stomach. They'll care when they realize Cindy is missing, especially those two that basically gave Jess the chance to eat her.

But as I always say, feel free to believe what you think makes it the most enjoyable for you! If I don't mention something it's probably because its either not important for the plot, or I wanted it to be ambiguous. Or I just forgot, lol.

Posted by Dudebro2092 1 year ago Report

Thanks for your response! Totally makes sense with the context! Looking forward to your next work!

Posted by johnnyboy246 1 year ago Report

God id love to be eaten by a jock like that. Lovely read!

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

As far as I know, anything can happen in this weird world. Thank you for reading!

Posted by johnnyboy246 1 year ago Report

i also read some of your other stuff, and il definetly gonna be giving a watch. im ussually more of a fan of femminie male preds but i do have a soft spot for himbo preds

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

I'm glad you like my stuff, even if it's not what you're usually into!

Posted by theo12hero 4 months ago Report

i understand now boss

Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

I guess that I will give one of my longer style rambles. I wanted to do this as soon as I read this story, but I got distracted, and had trouble focusing.

The story starts out with Wade and Jesse arguing about the ethics of vore. This is interesting. Many stories ignore the ethics, or legality of vore, and handwave the issue. Sometimes everyone is fine with vore. Sometimes there are strict laws against it. I guess a shame based society could try shaming it. Wade argues that it would be wrong to eat a girl, but not that Jesse would go to prison, although he says it is not allowed. Maybe this is a casual vore setting where it is technically against the rules, but no one enforces them, so preds like Jesse can eat a girl, but IDK. It doesn't have to be a well thought out setting to have a girl get digested.
Cindy makes a great prey for Jesse. He wants to eat the girl he thinks is the sexiest. He isn't worried about people finding out. I like how a cheerleader is the prey too. Hot girls are the best prey. In a setting where pred's sex drive is connected to vore, being a sexy cheerleader in a skimpy outfit attracts hungry guys. I like the details of Jesse staring at Cindy's butt after the game. It sets up what is going to happen later.
While it is convenient luck for Jesse to find Cindy alone in the shower, it isn't unbelievable. The detail about Jesse not being able to control his impulses works fine too. The description of Cindy's hot body in the shower was nice too. Her startled reaction shows that she is not a gutslut. I like how Jesse enjoys his meal, in the shower, and tastes her greedily.
One detail I really like is that Cindy is able to get upright inside Jesse's stomach. That way she can keep her head above the rising acids, to breathe, and stay alive longer.
When Jesse meets up with his friends again, Randall wants Cindy to stay in Jesse's stomach. I hope that there is a sequel, and Randall can get a girl of his own, but I understand that you are not able to write very fast.
The 3 of them go to math class, but no one seems to notice or care. This confuses me a bit. People should notice Jesse's massive stomach, and unless it is a casual vore setting, they should be freaked out that a human is dissolving a short distance away. It makes me wonder what the rules about vore are.
Cindy being digested by the end of class is a bit too fast for my liking, but I like slow digestion, and shouldn't complain, although I like complaining about things.
The ending hints at Jesse continuing to eat girls. He is the type of guy who could talk himself into doing whatever he wants. Maybe Randall can eat one too.

Anyways, I really liked this story. I hope you can write more, but I know that you have been having trouble writing stuff, so it is fine. I hope you enjoyed reading this ramble. Thank you for writing and posting the story.

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Thank you once again sir Random, for the rant. I do always enjoy how thorough you are with voicing your thoughts.
To explain the students lack of reaction, I have to be honest and say that I just wanted to sidestep the topic, because it's not what I wanted to focus on. If I had put more time into it I would probably have made it so that most people would be freaked out, as you predicted, with a couple people being more interested, like Randall.
As you also know, I'm not really a sequel guy, so there probably won't be another story with these characters, or at least not soon. But you definitely hit the intention that I had for their implied future spot on.

Thanks for the lovely comment <3

Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

I am glad that you enjoy my rambles. If you want, I can review some of your other stories, and write these long rambles on them. It might take me some time to get around to it.

I can be hesitant to be critical until I feel like the writer is fine with it. I don't want to be too critical on what is probably a vore preference of the writer either. I also understand that it takes time and effort to work out the details of the setting. Pages and pages of details about the legality of vore, would have distracted for the sexiness of the story.

Here is an example of something I left out that didn't feel like it helped my ramble review. I could be critical about Cindy's digestion, since her bones should have survived digestion for longer than her flesh, but I assume that you like soft melty digestion, and the the flesh melting off her bones isn't what you want.

Another thing that I really like about this story is that it is same-size. There is something really sexy about a guy eating a girl that could have possibly been his girlfriend. The college campus setting, in a modern world is also a preference of mine. A big reason I like this story is that it has some of Cindy's perspective after she is swallowed.

I like writing these rambling comments, would gladly give you more on your other stories, if you want them.

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

You absolutely have my blessing to ramble on my current and any future stories if you want! I can't speak for everyone of course, but I think I can pretty confidently say that most people like getting comments of any type, including these longer ones of yours. At least the one other writer I talk to IRL does. Plus you've been mostly correct about what was done out of preference vs out of convenience, like the softer digestion being what I personally like, and exposition being left out because it feels unnecessary.

Posted by Justsomeone 1 year ago Report

What a great way to end the year!

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

I agree, nothing better than gobbling up a sexy girl and ending her to end 2023

Posted by IceKek 1 year ago Report

Just want to say thank you. For writing such an amazing story with charchters an descriptions!

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Awww, thank you for the kind words! I love that you liked the characters I made up just to be an interesting background.

Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report

"It's hard to think of natural conversation when you're on your own and horny" I'm so glad that that's a feeling for other writers too, all my conversations sound clunky to me when I write them... I think the story read well though, no problems spotted by me! Great work!

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

I'm glad that resonated with someone, haha! Also good to hear it's not been too impactful though.

Posted by heromc 1 year ago Report

Absolutely amazing! I love how you focused on her best feature like that!

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Thanks! I generally tend to focus much more on boobs, so I wanted to give some attention to the booty this time

Posted by Justhereforvore1 8 months ago Report

Really love seeing cheerleaders as prey! They’re one of my absolute favorite preys in the world, so I’m very grateful to see more of this! It’s nice how she was digested too, I love that! Thank you, female prey is the BEST! Girls are just SO delicious!

Posted by MultipleCacti 8 months ago Report

There's something so good about cheerleaders being prey. It just feels right.
Thank YOU for the kind words! Girls are super delicious!

Posted by Justhereforvore1 8 months ago Report

Gotta show appreciation for cheerleader prey whenever I see them! Girls as prey are the most underrated thing ever, and I like how cruel her fate ended up being! Keep it up!

Posted by theo12hero 4 months ago Report

Male pred is getting interning also could you do more casualvore