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Titles are hard...
I was having trouble focusing on my longer term projects (totally unrelated to finding a new videogame to keep me up late) so I decided to try and do a shorter, one-shot piece. Which quickly tried to grow into something much longer, and ended up just having a silly number of potential sequels. Whoops.
Anyway, here's a little story about Bella, a pred with a medical condition. Kinda set it in the same world as my story with Tina the streamer, not that the world development matters much here.
I know disposal isn't for everyone, so as usual put up a wall around it. Not that I got too descriptive this time.
Enjoy! Comment! Point out typos, ask me questions, whatever!
Edit: I guess also congrats to this piece I made on the fly cause I couldn't focus for becoming one of my gallery's top 5 most viewed stories in just two weeks
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Posted by TMVore 1 year ago Report
Trouble with titles, lack,of focus with projects, late night gaming.
Sounds familiar. XD
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
The curse of attention issues and a poor sleep schedule :/
Not gonna stop me from writing tho
Posted by TMVore 1 year ago Report
I got a fewcstories to finish, but I also got digital enemies to defeat. :(
Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report
I find this story interesting, so I will give my rambling thoughts about it. Predators that MUST eat human prey are interesting, because it gives them an in-story reason to eat people other than just being horngry. It also puts time pressure on the pred. How often they must eat people would depend of many things, but their metabolism would have to be fast in order to burn off all the calories from their prey. One human a week is a lot of meat.
Another detail is that there couldn't be too many preds that must eat people often, or they would depopulate the area. Of course the prey could have larger families, and that would help. Larger families would also allow parents to care less about each child, since they could be expendable if there are many.
I also like how casual Amanda was about being eaten. This is just a personal preference rather than a story thing.
Mrs Green being upset about her daughter being eaten obviously makes sense, but if people are too upset about vore, then the setting isn't a casual vore setting. People killing preds for eating their loved ones would make a good setting, but wouldn't have the kinkiness of a casual vore world.
I like how Ms. Hays is fine with her daughter eating other people and is not ashamed of it at all.
THB, I don't care for the fast digestion, and am not interested in the idea of Bella eating Mr, and Mrs Green. This is from personal preference rather than plot reasons. It makes sense for Bella to eat Mrs Green, since she is upset with her. I like the idea of Bella eating Amanda's friends, and the idea of her eating Stacey. This is not a request, but me simply stating my preferences.
Anyways, this was an interesting story to read, and made me think about vore settings, even tho it wasn't that kinky to me. Good job writing it anyways.
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
Ah, I missed your comments.
On the "preds that must eat prey" note, pizza3695 did an interesting series exploring that, where basically preds would go... braindead, I think? If they didn't eat prey often enough. I admit that was a little bit on my mind writing the story.
Honestly any time I read a story about preds eating several people at a time I wonder how many freaking kids people are having in that setting. Or really just any story where preds are super common, honestly. Mrs. Green's anger makes a bit more sense if you consider that among many families that raise many children in the hopes they live, she raised only one (or just had one left) who ended up gurgled anyways.
Casual vore is great though :)
Ms. Hays was fun to write. A nurse with a daughter that has a terminal medical condition, one that just happens to involve digesting others... she'd have a pretty interesting life if she wanted to raise her kid well.
Fast digestion isn't my preference either, really, it just made sense in the setting, and well, I was trying for a simpler, faster story. I might have to bring Bella back for the other Wallace sister though... I mean, I did get another pretty nice thumbnail of her that I don't have use for yet.
Thanks for the compliment! Glad you enjoyed the story!
Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report
I had brainfog, and a lack of motivation to make long comments for awhile. I talked to Briarheart, and had said that I would make long reviews on his stories, and I only did a few, and lost motivation. There are still 2 more stories of his that I specifically want to write a long review for, but don't have the motivation, and keep putting it off.
Earlier this month, I was messaging another writer, and did some long reviews for his stories too. Another reason why I didn't leave comments other stories of yours, is because I am picky, and some of them had tags on my blacklist.
I have read pizza3695's stories about Eric, and most of his other stories too. I enjoyed them. I actually wasn't thinking about pizza3695's setting, but the other author I was messaging earlier this month, when I mentioned that "preds must eat prey".
Since human/human vore is my favorite, I am looking forward to more stories in this setting.
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
Oh, lack of motivation is no fun at all :(
I guess I figured that my stuff was on blacklists, my writing is kinda... all over the place, theme-wise sometimes. Thanks for stopping by and finding it in you to leave the comment though!
Posted by TrainerKatrine 1 year ago Report
This was an absolutely amazing read! Good stuff! ^~^
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
Posted by predlucyforhire 1 year ago Report
I don't know the set up of this setting but doing the math if there was only 1000 preds on earth each would have to eat 34-ish people a day for 80 years in order to cause extinction. You can extrapolate from there but in a world with a (Reasonable) number of predators it is feasable.
And
It would make sense for a pred mother to be annoyed that her daughters being stingy with a plentiful resource
XD
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
On the numbers note, you can probably assume people would have more children if there was good odds that one or more of their kids would be eaten before adulthood, which would probably help steady the population even if there was a large population of preds.
On the mom note, in my mind her mom being mad was more because she's a nurse, and Becky's basically terminally ill but bad at taking her "medicine." So much stress and distractions in high school, after all. Sometimes you barely have time to pick a fellow student who you can safely disappear into the sewers without people getting upset.
Posted by FluffV 1 year ago Report
This story is really good, I'm enjoying all the stories of yours I've read so far.
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying my work, I hope you like any you haven't read yet as well!