Posted by xvx17 1 year ago Report

Tanitah gave him many gifts, her own life, a place to live, even an increase in Erin's breasts. Also, the digestion of several days is quite realistic. I would have liked to see a little more of Gareth and Erin's relationship but good job.

Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report

Glad you enjoyed the writing! (Even more glad for the comment :)
The number of gifts was a fun thought for me too in writing, I started with "oh the gift is her as a meal" and the further I wrote the more things occurred to me that would come from that
I try to write my elves with a slower, more realistic digestion, which was fun cause it really changes how people can imagine the setting when preds like them are the only preds around
Glad you like Gareth, sorry I didn't focus much on that part. :p That ending was kind of a sudden change, originally a neighbor woman was going to show up and invite Erin to a party, the people at the party were going to end up giving her the other stuff... then I realized there was no way Erin was in any shape to go to a party, but I still wanted something wholesome... all down the line of thought, and suddenly there he was instead

.... I should've put a sequel on my potential stories poll. I can see them, running an inn in a few years... he goes out on a trip, she decides to surprise him when he gets back... they just happen to have a few expendable guests available... dang it, I already had too many ideas.

Sorry to ramble! I am very tired, but also very excited to have a comment to respond to, and both lead to rambling...

Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

I should get around to "reviewing" this story. I said that I would, so I should. Sometimes I just need to kick myself in the ass.

I like how you describe Santa as being an Elven Patriarch. It is creative, and it would explain why he lives so long, and why humans would give gifts back to elves.

The way Tanitha finds Erin makes sense and is realistic too. Poverty and homelessness has been a problem through history, and different societies, and cultures. It makes obvious sense that it would be present in a fantasy world too.

Tanitha bringing Erin home shows her compassion. Erin had bare feet, and that gave her a high risk of frostbite. Even if elves have good enough blood circulation to prevent frostbite, that would just mean the rest of Erin's body would cool faster, leading to hypothermia. If Erin's elven body could burn enough calories to keep her warm, that would just mean that she would starve faster. I guess what I am saying is that without Tanitha, Erin would be screwed.

The amount of food stored in Tanitha's house makes some sense. In cities, like where she lives, people didn't produce their own food, but where more likely to go and buy it. However this is winter, and it is usually best for people in the cities to store some foods like grains, dry breads, or salted meat. However, Tanitha seems poor too, and she might be relying on her neighbors like Gareth.
The detail about Tanitha needing to give Erin a meal as the host stood out too me. There is much less pressure to be a good host in our current western culture, as there is and has been in other cultures.

I like how Tanitha is so casual about feeding herself to Erin. Casual vore worlds are fun, but I think it would have made just a bit more sense if the thought of being eaten was arousing to Tanitha, rather than her just doing it out of duty, and the spirit of the season.

As for the swallowing scene, I liked it. Feet first makes sense to me, if the pred isn't sure that they can eat their prey, and if the prey is willing. I like the details about Erin struggling to swallow, and how it is tight for Tanitha. Erin isn't a big elf, and same size vore shouldn't be easy IMO. I also like how Erin enjoyed the taste of Tanitha's breasts, and Tanitha enjoyed the feeling of Erin swallowing them. You did a really good job with the swallowing part of the story.

It makes sense that Tanitha couldn't breathe inside the stomach. Even if Erin let her mouth hang open, and her esophageal sphincter stayed open it would still be hard for the air to travel up and down her throat to stay fresh enough for Tanitha to breathe. My personal preference is for the prey to be able breathe enough to stay alive to experience digestion. That is my kink, so I am complaining that it didn't happen while acknowledging that it made sense to do it your way in the story.

I REALLY like that you had slow digestion in the story. It makes sense that it would take awhile to digest a whole person because of the square cube law, Tanitha's skin protecting her body somewhat, her body being intact from not being chewed, and there are other reasons. Animals like snakes that swallow their prey whole take a long time to digest a large meal, so I think the default speed for digestion in vore stories should be slower than what most writers do.

While I like how you describe the from the outside, I would have also really enjoyed description, of what was happening to Tanitha's body inside Erin's stomach as the time passed, although that might be graphic, and gross people out, and would take more effort. One more detail I like about the digestion, is that Tanitha's flesh melted off her skeleton. While I like some melty digestion, it breaks my suspension of disbelief, when an author has an intact prey's bones melt before her skin does.

When Gareth meets Erin, I interpret it that Gareth was originally inviting Tanitha over because he thought she was hot. Gareth seems fine with an elf girlfriend and later wife. Gareth's gifts to Erin paid off.

In summary, this was a great story, and Tanitha gave Erin more gifts than she thought she would. I hope you enjoyed this ramble about your story.

Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report

I got a ramble!

I'm glad you liked the realism, I read... a fair bit of medieval history stuff as a kid, so I kind of wanted to make the setting feel real. Well, as real as I could without making the whole city stink like a pigpen.

I did try to make it sound like Erin would have certainly died without Tanitha's help, so I'm glad you caught that and liked it.

Apologies for the lack of detail in digestion, I wanted to get this out while it was still kind-of holiday time, and I didn't have it in me to detail several weeks of digestion and a budding romance as much as some might have liked while also getting it out in a decent timeframe.

Some arousal on Tanitha's part likely would have made it a more fun read, but with medieval people being commonly underinformed on many things (sex-ed, for example) and/or with her knowledge of it being about adult/child scenarios, it felt fitting that she might not think of being eaten as a sexual act.

The idea behind Gareth (not that I mentioned it much) was that the neighbors were celebrating the holiday, knew the new neighbor was probably spending it cold and alone, and sent someone over to invite her to the festivities to get to know her a bit better. The fact they sent an unmarried guy about her age, well, I'm sure his mother had certain hopes ;) I don't think she got the result she expected though...

Many thanks for the ramble, have one in return!