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Siren at the pool (Stranger vore #2) By MediumGarlic7000 -- Report

I seem to really like comas...

Just another meal for another pred, this time someone's mom at a pool.

Characters:
Sandra (you) - Curvy milf, long red hair, orange bikini

Adam - Middle age man, your husband

Sammy - Young red headed boy, rowdy, your son

The lady (pred) - Slender, long black hair, pale skin, black bikini, professional woman digester

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Grimlock030

Posted by Grimlock030 1 year ago Report

Nice

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msc13

Posted by msc13 1 year ago Report

This was great! Nice and straightforward, you’re really good at this.
One suggestion, I thought the italicized voices were a little odd, mainly because that is almost always used for internal dialogue.
Looking forward to your next!

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MediumGarlic7000

Posted by MediumGarlic7000 1 year ago Report

Yea I see where you're coming from
I usually only used italics when i'm doing internal thoughts, i just did it this time in an attempt to make the dialogue easier to notice at a glance.
I'll probably try to do something else to make it stand out for the next one.

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msc13

Posted by msc13 1 year ago Report

I wouldn’t overthink it. I think appropriate paragraph breaks is the most straightforward way.

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