Posted by JithraRufure 6 months ago Report

That was a delight to read, I always enjoy love party wipes and the dangers of being an adventurer.

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

Thank you! Always nice when I write right into someone's preferences, I'm glad you liked it! ^^

Posted by IddlerItaler 6 months ago Report

Happy anniversary. And you have written quite the adventure for it, with a five-course meal!

"There's a bit of a spoiler in the tags so uh, if you don't like spoilers maybe skip over those for now."

Oh, I see am not the only one who considers tag-skipping a valid approach. There's an obvious risk as you might run into a trope you dislike or even a trigger, but I do enjoy reading blind.

"Young lamias only got the worst food, dead animals and furred creatures and the like… a living, breathing, furless prey was the best thing to ever touch her tongue."

Funnily enough, lamias could love furred preys if they followed the logic that snakes love rodents and the like.

"She wouldn’t, of course. Forget her hunger, the odds of her winning and eating this prey again if they both had time to recover were… poor. Even if it meant she could taste that wonderful flavor again…"

In complete fairness, if she could scarf the warrior down the first time, she could probably do it a second time after she had been worn down by hours of struggling and acids... But yeah, it makes sense she'd play it safe, and she'd understandably not trust humans that much.

...Lol. I loved that end reveal. The group wanted to get snacked on all along, and for all their seeming-incompetence, they were more in control of their fate than they let on. The way the last prey undid her own knot was a cherry on top.

Sucks that Ashi's village got burnt down by a human army. Coincidentally enough, some lamias in my setting also got exterminated by human supremacists and it definitively wasn't a pretty affair.

Ashi might have easily craved revenge after the traumatic way she lost her home, and believed she was getting it as she taught herself to become a better huntress... only to have that illusion dispelled as the last two members of the group went like: "Are you gonna eat me already? I have a fetish for being monster food and I don't have all night." Ouch.

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

I honestly didn't look at tags for... years, I think? I mean, I'd look up stories by their tags, but it took a long time before I realized that reading tags before reading the story was a big thing people do.

I figured in the tradition vore-fantasy setting where lamias love to eat people, eating actual animals and stuff had to be seen as an inferior food... I wonder if a snake would prefer to eat a mouse or a mouse-sized human... well, that's a mystery that'll never be solved. I like the thought though!

For spitting the warrior out and eating her again, well, she might be a lamia, but one of them is a trained warrior that had been caught in a weakened state... and the other one is basically a teenaged girl. Given that she'd also be weakened by spitting her meal out, I figured she might not have the best odds in that match-up...

Glad you liked that ending... originally I was going to play it more obvious, like, every time her belly started rumbling loudly one of them would very obviously walk off away from the group... I liked this way better :)

I feel like vengeance might not be too big a thing for her? Like, lamias hunt humans for food, and when someone gets killed by a prey animal that isn't usually something you're gonna seek revenge for... not that getting home and family destroyed isn't traumatic, but sometimes that's just how things go...

Having her think she was better than she thought, only to get the truth dropped on her head at the end was fun; makes it fun to rethink through the story and imagine how the scenes went from the human side of things :P

Posted by IddlerItaler 6 months ago Report

For what it's worth I see "Lamias are innate preds who love to eat humans" as more of a fanon trope that's popular in vore than anything. Some lamias like in Monster Girl Quest are also capable of vore, but they don't, like, need it to survive and are shown relating to humans just fine (Ilias' meddling aside). It seems like a general trend vore authors have with non-human species, where they turn them into preds who devour humans or smaller species, sometimes obligatorily, sometimes just because they like it. But in a sense, this story inverted the trend as it showed humans as perfectly capable of beating lamias and only getting eaten when they chose to be. That's a fun twist.

Maybe if Ashi had met a mousegirl like Casey did, she would have happily glomphed her too. And in other fantasy settings, there might be species like Skaven or giant beavers, though that's getting into a different aesthetic style.

Fair enough about the warrior. Ashi couldn't have known that the warrior had let herself be eaten, and depending on the type of prey she was, she might have even pummeled the pred in disappointment at being spared.

Since it's a vore setting I'm willing to suspend my disbelief whenever someone isn't all too shaken by the fall of their comrades. Maybe Ashi moved on from the loss of her tribe like the adventurers moved on whenever one of them was nommed. With that said, I'm not a fan of applying animal-on-animal or hunter-on-prey morality when both species are obviously sapients. Even if Ashi was raised to think of humans as food, she could likely see the assault on her village as a re-negotiation of their places on the foodchain. If she committed to seeing humans as just intelligent food on legs then she might consider the attack as something akin to a natural disaster, like if hogs caused a landslide that destroyed a mountain village - very few people would bother hunting the hogs down. Then again, if the hogs came in with armours and torches...

But I'll admit, it's fun to think that Ashi was like a metaphorical wild jaguar and the adventurers were a bunch of bratty tourists making jokes and getting blasted on the safari trip of their lives. I like to think that they were making remarks like "Bet we won't see Archer again, huh?", "A spring! Ten coins says Blondie will get jumped by a mermaid." and gossiping about just what kind of creature was grumbling around them, if they hadn't already figured out. There may have been a linguistic barrier between them, that maybe got bridged by a handy tongues spell at the very end.

I chose to picture Ashi as 18, or whatever the equivalent age is for lamia growth, but either way this piece doubled as a pretty adventurous coming of age story, now that I think about it.

Also, I thought of a random significance. Ashi - Ash, because her home turned to ash.

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

There was originally going to be more lore at the end, like, humans used to be/have predators too, but they don't now, so humans with the prey urge need to find monsters to do it, or maybe they were just apart of a guild of prey... fortunately, there wasn't room to fit that in organically, so we got the more concise and interpretable version. Though it does amuse me to imagine a world where humans could totally wipe out preds if they wanted, they just don't because some people are into getting nommed...

A: giant beavers? B: yeah, skaven might make good prey... though I don't know enough Warhammer to probably use them without pissing off fans

Hm... now I just need to do the dark version, where she's super traumatized and hunting the adventurers to relieve both her fears and hunger... kidding, of course :P I wasn't sure how to deal with the backstory I created, so I just kinda... ignored it. Except that part that seemed like it might force flashbacks, of course. Any explanation I make is really just an excuse for not being sure how to create the character I created :/

The deepest drive I gave the group in my mind was that one of them wanted to find a dragon deep in the woods to get nommed by... specifically, Blondie, as you called her. Thus the reason she was a little more resistant than the others to the idea of gurgling in a lamia gut... at first. She came around eventually~

Y'know I could probably tag this as coming of age...

Yeah, somewhere in the 16-18 range was where I imagined her, I was honestly a little curious if she read that way to others or if it was a little more ambiguous

And I honestly can't recall if name or backstory came first in my mind, cause I could totally see one influencing the other...

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

Oh cool people added a bunch of tags for me that was nice of them

Posted by IddlerItaler 6 months ago Report

In hindsight, another thing that adds to the twist is that some authors do write humans as incompetent and only really a threat when in numbers (it's nowhere near as everpresent as the vocal complainers make it out to be, but it's there sometimes), and "the prey struggled, but only ended up pushing deeper inside" is a pretty common line in vore, so certain things flew under the radar: "Her constricted prey managed a few weak struggles, but at this point struggling just meant a faster trip down the lamia’s throat." One has to wonder if, looking back, she and the other girls were in fact pushing themselves inside, and she misinterpreted that just like she misinterpreted their other "struggles".

Nobody expects the giant beavers to strike... Skaven aren't that complicated. One can just imagine classical goblins, but with crazy scavenged tech and backstabbing cranked up to the max, and also they have a speech quirk where they'll use a random compound or two every sentence, like "man-person" or "author-writer". Of course, they are sorta different from dwarves and such in that they're seen as a Warhammer specific creature, and you might rather have demihuman rat girls anyway.

Clearly, Ashi needs to team up with the goblins of the woods, form a resistance group against the evil government, and become the three-time championess of the Hungering Forest's Great Games with her vampire and werewolf boyfriends. ;) ...I think this story is fairly dark, and I wouldn't say you did nothing with that backstory as you showed the trauma from fire and she was pretty paranoid around humans. It's easy enough for the reader to decide whether or not vengeance is among Ashi's motivators, and how much. It's probably below hunger and hormones, but still.

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

You noticed! ^^ Yeah, I chose those lines specifically cause I'd read them before, and at the same time, because they'd read differently once someone read to the end and learned the prey's motivation~

Yeah... I'd probably end up going with rat girls, thinking about it. I tend to go for sexier prey, and Skaven are... kinda not that. Also they're in the "things I smash with warhammers" part of my brain, not the part for vore and sexy stuff, so that probably doesn't help either.

Ah yes, the vore-themed Hunger Games/Twilight/Dune combo story the fans have all been waiting for... I do like the interpretation there though. Some things I deliberately leave open to interpretation, but it's nice when things I kind of didn't can still be read that way... it's fun chatting with you and seeing how the world I've written seems from a reader's perspective ^^

Posted by FaceInCrowd42 6 months ago Report

Usually I never even consider reading stories with this much length in one file, but the MC is interesting, my favorite pred species no less, and how well written this is I'd say is about tops for this website. You've done an excellent job.

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

Thank you very much for the compliments! My stuff does get a little long sometimes, but I'm glad you decided it was worth a read :)

Posted by LuridLuncheon 6 months ago Report

I always love your stuff but this was fucking amazing!

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

Thank you!! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

If I can ask, what set it above my other work?

Posted by xvx17 6 months ago Report

I am a big fan of this story. The way it describes the environment, the inexperienced predator, the cezeria and the world in which things happen. At one point in the story I thought there would be an adventurous man who would have sex with the Lamia and then she would eat him.

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

Glad you enjoyed so many aspects of the story! Though, I have to ask, what's cezeria?

Also, yeah, not many men in my stories... it takes me way longer to write a story when I include them for some reason...

Posted by xvx17 6 months ago Report

hunting, I'm sorry, I use a translator and sometimes I make mistakes

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

No worries! I just wasn't sure if it was another language or a writing term I didn't know, thought I'd ask :P

Posted by Randomdude5 6 months ago Report

I found this story interesting. The part where Ashi's village was burned down by a human army makes sense. Unless humans have a treaty with lamias, and lamias enforce laws against eating unwilling humans, the humans probably aren't going to like being eaten by them. Because humans can be really good at hating, there is a good chance that the humans would want to eliminate the threat posed by lamias. Of course this is a vore setting, and maybe humans would want to keep some lamias around so they can be eaten. Not every human group is going to behave the same way.
I like how the women are wearing bikini armor, since they want to be eaten. Might as well wear very little. When Ashi's stomach growled, and the archer chose that time to separate herself from the group, it seem too convenient the first time I read it. It makes sense that the archer heard Ashi, and wanted to feed her. I like how Ashi enjoyed her prey. It is always nice when a pred appreciates their meal, and enjoys the feeling of squirms inside their stomach. I somewhat expected the prey to try to talk when inside her stomach, but it might be hard to hear, or they didn't want to give up the goal of the adventuring party.
The way the party is more excited about finding the spring, than mourning for the loss of one of their party members just before Ashi get's her second prey, is also a hint.
I also like how the warrior struggled so much in Ashi's stomach. Being in better physical shape would mean that the prey would have more stamina to struggle. IddlerItaler has a point. Since Ashi ate the warrior the first time, she should have been able to eat her again, if she let the warrior out of her stomach. My interpretation is that Ashi could have done it, but is risk adverse in that situation. Of course if she had let the warrior out, the redheaded warrior may have fed herself to Ashi, but IDK.
The last meals were creative too. The mage tied up to tent posts was kinda sexy. It also makes sense that the 2 who were eaten last would pleasure each other in Ashi's stomach.

Anyways, you wrote another great story, and I enjoyed it. I am a bit scatterbrained, so that is why my comment is a mess. Your stories don't disappoint in quality, and I am looking forward to reading your next story.

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

Setting-wise, nothing's really set in stone... I kind of like to think that the kingdom was just keeping their territory clear... they don't want a den/village of monsters in their borders, but they wouldn't be too worried about a few slipping away. Especially if Ashi left their borders... they might care about monsters in the country, but it's no concern of theirs if people want to risk their lives / end their lives in a belly outside the country's borders... of course, now that Ashi has a taste for humans she might end up becoming a bit of a nuisance...

I liked the idea of having an actual excuse for bikini armor... :P Also kind of liked the idea that they might be part of a larger group that sends out parties like this occasionally, so the bikini armor makes their intent nice and clear to the "locals" they encounter, so they could have assumed that Ashi knew who they were and that was why she wasn't bothering to hide very well as she followed them.

Glad the archer part worked for you; she was definitely meant to give the feeling that something odd might be going on. As for Ashi enjoying Ashi enjoying herself... yeah, not much to say there is there. Squirmy meals feel nice~

I did definitely have them muffled by the belly... though on the other hand, Ashi was nearly of-age to hunt humans, so it'd be entirely rational that one of the first things you'd learn would be to ignore anything your food says... not that I at-all implied that in the story, but it could be a thing.

The lack of mourning was 100% a big hint; given the group, a passing congratulations as they realized one of their group had gotten what they wanted would be more likely.

The warrior let herself get eaten once and probably would have done it again, but as far as Ashi knew the only reason she ate her so easily was because she was tired out from fighting, and that if she spit out her prey it'd take her a bit to recover and re-consume her prey, time her meal might use to recover and escape or alert the rest of the humans... not worth the risk. Plus, thought I had that I didn't really write... a tasty, sweaty prey probably wouldn't taste so good when they were covered in stomach acid rather than salty sweat.

The last two took the longest to pick their fates... maybe the one before them was still around and got caught by something in the night, maybe they were lovers, or sisters, or maybe they got eaten together instead of one by one... glad you liked the end result of that particular indecision ^^

We'll see if my next story or next RP log comes out first... I just finished a long-term RP, but I've got a few projects I'm working on too... only time will tell.

Posted by Ravenhide 6 months ago Report

Found your stories several months ago. Decided to check your page again on a whim and was pleased to see another of your works!

Posted by PaperWriter 6 months ago Report

Always happy to provide more vorny writing ^^
Hope you enjoyed it!

Posted by JustaNumber 2 months ago Report

This was just an amazing read and I will not deny I will use some of it as inspiration for my own (soon to be) first vore story!