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A story that stretched on unexpectedly long, about a demihuman boy in a human school, in a world where humans are prey to about every other sentient species...~
I left what actual race the main character is rather vague, so let him be whatever you want ^^
IMPORTANT PART: You might be wondering why the title looks like a series title! Because, ideally, I want it to be! I have a comm I'm about to start on, but ~while I'm doing that~ please feel free to comment on who you'd like to be the prey in the next chapter, or, if you see someone already had a good idea, comment in support of them! This can be... basically anyone; his mom, his sisters, fellow students, Charlotte and his other friends, the unnamed redhead or other staff, random people... anyone in the town is fair game, though I tried to add in plenty of ideas along the way here. Hopefully once I'm through my comm I'll come back and take a look at the comments and start on part two ^^
Just realized how long it's been since I posted m/f, too, so... surprise!
Enjoy!
Edit: I originally meant to include a summary of his sisters on this post, so here it is, if a bit late. Basically, two older sisters, two younger sisters, I tried to fit them to a variety of "types".
Oldest, not yet introduced, would be a college student. Ideally, she'd like to be the sister that makes it through, since she's gotten far enough to have some plans for her future... but if her brother chooses her, she won't really mind~
Second oldest is Nadia, of course. She was pretty well introduced in this story, but might as well summarize; an athletic girl that has seen a few of her fellows end food for preds, and has long known that her turn would come one day, for her to end up in her brother...
Second youngest, unnamed so far, would be the shyest and curviest of the group. More innocent than her sisters, but well aware of (and possibly interested in) her inevitable fate as food for her older brother.
Youngest is named in the story; Claire! She was meant to be a more spoiled child, given she was born after Nick was adopted as a youngster... after all, why not spoil her when she was inevitably going to end up feeding her brother anyways?
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Posted by Yumyum18 3 months ago Report
Damn, this was a hot start
Can't wait for big brother to have two juicy sisters for his next meals
Posted by PaperWriter 2 months ago Report
Ideally he'll get all four of them down, as long as I can keep my motivation up :)
Also, added descriptions of the four sisters to the author's notes so feel free to let me know if there's some you'd prefer seeing over others
Posted by Dragonsoul777 3 months ago Report
This is amazing, been hooked since your dragon story and everything since has been awesome. As for suggestions, how about Nick here works his way down the family registry with Charlotte as an observer, after all having someone to give first hand accounts will be more than enough to keep the school all riled up
Posted by PaperWriter 2 months ago Report
Dang, glad you've been enjoying my content that long! ...Also, weird that I can think of it as a "long time" since I started posting now ^^'
Having a dedicated observer like that could be fun, though then again, if we wanted to spread rumors around the school we could also just have him eat them while they were at school :P
Posted by Randomdude5 3 months ago Report
First, I want to say that I enjoy this story, and I like your writing style.
The setting is interesting. Humans being eaten by demis or anthropomorphized animals is common in some types of vore. IRL humans are at the top of the food chain because of our technology, but humans being eaten is sexy. I guess humans massively outnumber the demis, or the law about their being a limit of eating 1 human per day would be much stricter. One human per day is still a lot, and I wonder how the human population sustains itself. I assume that humans have big families, and hand-waving helps too. Speaking of big families, I hope that Nick has lots of sisters to eat. The humans "feel" a bit too willing to jump down his throat in my opinion. This is probably a personal preference of mine. The reason they "feel" too willing, to me is partly because humans that willing would get eaten before they reproduce sustainably, but mainly because I feel like too many willing meals competing to jump down Nick's throat ruins the "intimacy" of vore.
I like how Nick's birthday is a big day, since he can now legally eat humans. Of course he could have done it illegally, and it seems probable that some girl would have wanted him to eat her before he was old enough, since the prey are so eager, but that is not the point of this story. While I like the way Mrs. Harper tempted him with sex, I don't like the age difference, or the fact that she was cheating on her husband with Nick. That is just personal preference again. I like how the redhead confirms that he ate Mrs Harper, and I like how Charlotte asks him if he wants seconds, or someone to rub his belly. The horny side of my mind says that Nick should have kissed Charlotte, or licked her cheek to taste her. Another detail that I like is how Nick's mom, and Mrs Harper talk to each other. I like it when a prey is still a person to talk to even tho they are inside a stomach and digesting. I like how Nadia came to help him digest his first meal, but I "feel" like Nick's sisters feel too willing to be meals. It makes the family a bit awkward to have them that willing to jump down his throat or fuck him. Of course you might be going for the tension of having them squabble over who will be his next meal. The buckets are a good idea if you want to have him save his dumps, and compare them, or show them off to others. If collecting scat, and comparing, or showing it off is not what you are going for, a plumber could install pred rated plumbing.
As for who I want Nick to eat next, I think Nadia, Charlotte, Claire, and his other sisters should be on the list, along with the redhead, and other girls from school. Since it is the weekend, I think he should eat one of his sisters next. Charlotte could come over to his house to visit him, but that would make his sister jealous. Personally, I don't want him to eat his mom, but I would rather have her encourage him to eat more girls. Another option for a future vore story is to have Mrs. Harper's replacement use Nick to give a classroom vore demonstration by having him eat one of the students. If he hasn't eaten her yet, Charlotte could be the lucky girl.
I hope this didn't feel too critical, because I mentioned what didn't feel right too me, and my personal preferences. I am eagerly waiting for the next story in this series.
Posted by PaperWriter 2 months ago Report
Sorry to not respond sooner, I've been a bit out of it lately and long responses felt like too much. I'm glad you enjoyed the story!
I'd try to explain the setting but I doubt even I know what's going on here... I just kinda set out to write some very willing prey and tried to keep it a cohesive setting. :p The "1 human a day" thing was more for story purposes, though by the setting it's mostly the case that this is a human-only area that preds can visit, so there's a rule to keep them from eating too many and causing problems. The fact that Nick lives in the zone... I'm sure won't cause any problems ;)
Too bad it wasn't all to your preference :/ Though, on the Charlotte note... he did lick her cheek?
The willingness of all the characters was a bit of an experiment, I wanted to play with sex and willingness more than usual with this one... with the sisters, they typically wouldn't be as forward as Nadia here, I'm sure their mom kept them in line before his birthday, but now that he's of age their behavior is likely going to change, though of course the depends on the sister.
On the disposal note... oops. Yeah, come to think of it, given how I put in that his family was getting a fair bit of money to raise him, and how long he'd been in the family... his mom totally would've just bought some pred-grade plumbing at some point. Maybe I'll fix that in the next chapter...
I do like the ideas for the future chapters; on that note, I did add brief descriptions of the sisters in the author's notes like I meant to do originally and totally forgot about ^^'
Definitely didn't feel too critical to me. Hopefully I get through the comm I'm working on decently fast and get to the next chapter of this... though I've got a lingering cold sapping my energy and my horny, so... we'll see how long it takes
Posted by Randomdude5 2 months ago Report
I am glad that you didn't skip my comment. I was wondering if something was distracting you, so I am going to blame the cold.
I originally wrote my suggestions of who Nick should eat in the next chapter before you wrote the descriptions of his sisters. Now that you have written their descriptions, I think Nick should eat Nadia or Claire first. Because his oldest sister has plans for her life, she isn't going to try to jump down his throat, especially since there are other girls for him to eat. His 2nd youngest sister, is also shy, so she will probably be more patient waiting for her turn. That leaves Nadia and Claire as the most eager to be eaten. Of course Charlotte may come over to his house to try to get him to eat her, or someone may have given out his phone number, or address to the eager prey in the school, but I think it is best that he has some private time with his family for the weekend. IMO Charlotte, and the other girls at school can wait for the next school week. Of course Nick could go to the store or something since, it is the weekend, and meet a girl to eat there, but I still think he should eat one of his sisters first. Nadia is probably the girl he would pick to eat next, but Claire is a spoiled child, so she might beg, and pout to be his next meal. I have one more thought about Claire being eaten. Mrs. Harper felt some pain during digestion, so it makes sense that others might too. Claire is the youngest in the family, and is spoiled, so she might be the least capable of Nick's sister at taking the pain of his digestion. Claire might beg, and plead to be eaten, but then discover that being digested hurts some. Of course this might go against your goal of having the characters be more willing to be eaten.
Posted by DK2207 3 months ago Report
Man that was good now I want a younger sister to sneek down that belly wile he is sleaping ????
Posted by DK2207 3 months ago Report
Man that was good now I want a younger sister to sneek down that belly wile he is sleaping ????
Posted by PaperWriter 2 months ago Report
Hm... tempting... though given they're his sisters, I was planning to give them more personal send-offs than that... I could totally see someone sneaking down his throat though, given how eager I wrote the prey in this setting
Posted by FatalEndeavor 2 months ago Report
You're quickly becoming my favorite author, I particularly enjoy the way your preys receive a final blow once they've been digested to a certain point.
As to answer your question, I'm curious to meet the rest of his sisters.
Posted by PaperWriter 2 months ago Report
Thank you for the compliments!! I'm glad you're enjoying my style ^^
I knew there was something I meant to add to this... I was planning to have a brief overview of his sisters in the description of the story. Whoops. Guess I better add that now... ^^''
Posted by Trew 2 months ago Report
Please make into a series, this story is great
Posted by Trew 2 months ago Report
Also, my personal theory is that Nick's parents are a neko and a kitsume, which is why he isnt really one or the other, and any genetic complications to this idea can be explained by, look further down the family tree
Posted by Randomdude5 2 months ago Report
In the first paragraph there is this line.
"He could easily tell that he was at least 3/4 human, but his adoption papers weren’t too clear on the other quarter."
If I assume that Nick is 3/4 human, and you think that he has both neko and kitsune genes, then the simplest answer is that 6 of his great-grandparents are human, one is a neko, and the other is a kitsune.
Posted by Trew 2 months ago Report
Exactly, and there isnt anything saying this could be false, therefore, its a valid theory...
God, im nerding out on vore content
Posted by PaperWriter 2 months ago Report
I'm just happy you enjoyed the story enough to theorize about it :)
Can't confirm or deny his heritage though, cause I don't know it either... I even left it unclear in my own head so I wouldn't accidentally imply him being one thing over another. For all I know he's a dog or something.
Posted by Trew 2 months ago Report
Nah, he isnt a dog, but his adopted family sure are a bunch of bitches
Posted by Perodian 2 months ago Report
Interesting that she effectively coerced him into eating her. She went on about how he wouldn't get the chance to eat his sister first anyways, because someone else would be more insisting on the plunge before he made it out un-filled. I also notice that there is a reappearance of the mention of blood flowing to a penis making it harder to blush. I hadn't heard of such a thing prior to reading these first time stories.
Posted by PaperWriter 2 months ago Report
I mean, if she hadn't been as forward as she was, there was a very real chance that he would have just left and ended up eating one of his sisters as his first prey... and that wasn't what she or I wanted :P
Didn't honestly realize I mentioned the blushing thing two stories in a row... whoops. No idea if it's real or where I read it originally, but it comes to mind when I'm thinking of blushy guys I guess